Aww that was so sweet, go channie! XD (I don't read baekhyeol but that was just adorable <3) I thought it would end so very very badly but that was a total 180 degree turn and absolute love.
As for advices, hm..you just missed some words and instead of using _ use " " to show your speeches.
When you wrote "Sigh." It seems out of place, try making it italics to show that it is an action and just use that word as a paragraph. It helps to emphasise the word, well it does in my opinion. XD
Other than that I found couple of grammatical errors which can be easily fixed if you go through it again, it's something I never do XD so my story is always filled with typos. XD
All in all this was just an adorable story with couple of mistakes ^^
first I thought it was going to be sad
but it wasn't
what a relief
such a cute oneshot
and baekhyun shouldn't worry so much
but it's understandable
I mean chanyeol cheated on him once
anyway....it's a really cute&great fic
you should be carefull on making mistakes though
you sometimes forgot words
and after writing he she or it you should put an s on the end of the verb
it's right to write
Park Chanyeol loves Byun Baekhyun
sorry for my rant xD
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