If Aeroplanes Were Shooting Stars

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He could remember the first time they’d met. It was the month of February and the weather had been positively dreadful. He could remember the way the rain fell in heavy sheets, drenching his clothes and his hair and his bag as he tried to hurry to the studio. He’d been a dancer – although he preferred to call himself an artiste – and he had more than convinced himself that there was nothing else he’d rather be. He could remember the way he’d brushed past him, not knowing how little it took for two lives to become completely entwined and woven together in a way that it felt as though one would be incomplete without the other’s existence.

 

 

Foreword

 :| I'm just moving most of my writings from Livejournal to...well, here, so that I have an idea of what I've written and blah, blah, and just have everything in one place. So. Yes. Okay. =n=

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thenothingness #1
This story was absolutely beautiful.
b2astly #2
i liked it ^^ i thought it was slow and quiet. it was sometimes confusing to decipher who is feeling what where, but if you follow the story, it's not too confusing. i've read it about three time now, and each time i like it a little more ^^
Gohannah4444 #3
Sequel? YAY! I would love to read it since it's Kiwoon!
Alright, so what you said was the same as I thought, you didn't re-read it. You know, when you write a story that holds a lot of emotion like this, it takes a lot of time. So you have to re-read it to 'feel the flow of emotions'(because with me, i can easily be turned-off by jus a sentence or so, so I'm very strict 'bout that).
Oh, and to help you to understand what i meant when i said 'giving readers some spaces to think', I suggest you reading 'Seoul', a Junkwang fic: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/111624/seoul-b2st-beast-junkwang-kiwoon-korean-
Hope this will help...And remember, I'm waiting for ur Sequel!
novocainex #4
@Gohannah4444 Offensive? Not at all. I take whatever I get and I try to build it up as constructive criticism, and honestly, I can do well with as many tips as I can get, so, tbh, I'm more grateful than resentful that you took the time to read and analyse the writing.
About it being a bit difficult to take in and keep up with, I'm well aware of that fact actually. orz I wrote this over a year ago (perhaps February last year?) and back then, I hardly ever took the time to sit and go through my writings for structural errors - I still don't. :| But the run-on sentences and overflow of scenic descriptions are two things I've noticed and already know. I just don't have the time to rewrite this entire thing just yet. (But hopefully, I'll manage to reread this piece and fix it someday soon!)
As for the peaceful ending...I think it's more like a peaceful beginning, if you know what I mean. Like, a fresh start to their lives together, regardless of any possible future restraints. But I get what you mean, and maybe, possibly, I might write a follow-up piece to this story to show their life after the current time period.
As for the rest of your comment...well, thank you! ^^ I'll try to write whenever I can, and hopefully my writings won't be a dissapointment. Thank you for reading/commenting!
novocainex #5
@BananaYogurt Aww, thank you so much, dear. I'm glad you found it nice, took the time to read/comment. I can't promise I'll update all my stories always on time, but I will do my best to update as regularly as possible whenever I am free. ^^
Gohannah4444 #6
So, maybe it was because of NueeSan that made me wanted to judge ur fic strictly, so I'm sorry if you think my comment for ur fisrt posted fic on AFF is a bit offensive...
Let's talk about what I don't like first. The story line is good, very simple, very easy to understand, but the way you wrote is a bit quite hard to...take it in. Descriptive is good, but too descriptive is a distraction (It means that sometimes you should just give some details then leave readers some spaces to think, and imagine). in the other hand, the ending is good, nice, happy. But to me, it's a bit too peaceful, i hope they could complete their dream and live a REAL happy life BEFORE and AFTER that.(But this is just my personal idea, so nevermind!)
Okay, now i will say about the things that i like. As i said before, too descriptive is bad, but only when u try to describe the SITUATIONS. When it comes to emotions, the way you wrote it was perfect! i especially love the part when Kikwang pulled junhyung into a passionate kiss. The rush of emotions and actions were great, and i could feel the adrenalin rushed under my skin!~ At the same time, i like the (..) parts. i don't know, i like fics that have 'collisions in feeling' like that.
Lastly, i want to say that I like your fic, and love you even more because i can see a potential Junkwang writer in front of me. World needs more Junkwang everyday, and you give me reason to wait. Good luck!
novocainex #7
@NueeSan Awwww, thank youuuu ;u; And yeah, lolol, I figured keeping all my stories in one place would make it easier to work with. ._. Otherwise i feel so lost because idk what I've already written, and what not.
And I agree with you about the genres. sob. Why doesn't anyone write happy fics? Now, I love angst and tragedy and drama as much as anyone else, but I really do wish people would bring back the age of cliché writings. There's something sweet about innocence that people seem to be forgetting lately :| why. why. idk. sob But thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment, dear! <3
NueeSan #8
Welcome on asianfanfic keke, I've already read this like three times on lj (but I've never let a comment, maybe it's a punition because you didn't keep your other fic with yourself and I had to search through the entire kiseob tag on beastattack to find them...-lame excuse I know, sorry).
To me, junkwang biased, this fic is gold, this is just perfect, that's how junkwang should be ...well, not always because there are also others amazing fics, but they're almost all on lj. Seriously, the pairing became more popular lately and fics became crappier (not all) as consequence the amont of and car accident in the pairing suddenly increased (do you notice how those kind of tragedies appear like 20 times more in fanfictions than in reality?) -__- so it feels good to come back to the old good roots (I don't know when you write this though, it was just already there when I discovered beast...). Whatever, this is perfect :D
So I guess I'll be able to find your other fics now :3
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