Chapter 1: Before I read this story, I just have to let out that I am scared right now and it almost gave me a heart attack when I saw that picture and its 10 pm so yeah I really got a heart attack at the picture ._.
Chapter 2: That was scary. I like how the ending is open to the readers interpretation.
Your story is well written but the only thing I want to say is to be careful of word choices because sometimes it doesn't seem clear on what it's supposed to mean. For example you wrote:
"His whole body shaked of fear"
Instead of saying that, you can say "his whole body shook from fear"
Other than that, your story was clear and enjoyable. Great job:)
I just woke up and then looked to the mirror. I saw a woman with messy hair and bloody eye. It was me xD lol.. I used eye-liner and i when i washed my face, the black thing roll down my cheek.
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