reading your story while listening to random ballad songs.
i don't know how can i described in words how much i love your story. not only this, but the others too.
the hair part, their friendship, their relationship and how they break up. they were awesomely realistic.
and i think chasethestars comments just summarize what i feel about your story.
keep on writing :)
It's sad they had to break up, but we can't have everything we want, and some things are just not meant to be =\ In their case, it was both, added with some external pressure the girl must have felt from the media and fans, I've observed. Minho could've felt resentful towards her for ignoring his pleas for her to stay, but I guess he must've loved her too much to even put the blame on her and just opted to be understanding. When they met again after some time, I knew there was a slim chance that they weren't going to get back together, and I wouldn't have had it any other way, since it's clear that they've moved on with their respective lives already despite the nostalgia they must feel from time to time. [I guess I'm just too realistic for my own good, ahaha~ XD;;]
Transition of events was smooth, I must say. I like how Minho and the girl's relationship from friends, to lovers, and then downgrading to being strangers developed slowly without being too dragging. I can't thank you enough for not doing the opposite as well a.k.a. rushing into things like summarizing everything in three sentences [or less!] just because the writer's in a rush to get to the main action O.o Your prose is simple but clear so it wasn't difficult to imagine everything playing out in my head, so props to you for executing both of these elements well ^^v Just one little thing, though: maybe you would like to be careful of your tenses in the future? The tense-shifting didnt really distract me from reading, and a lot of writers do slip up from time to time in this department, so taking a little precaution in your upcoming works won't hurt a bit ^^;;
It boggles me why this story has only one comment [two, if you count mine] O.o A pity, since it deserves more recognition. With that said, I enjoyed reading this a lot; my apologies in advance if this comment was too long >.< Thank you for sharing this, and I hope to read more from you in the future~! ^^
I came across your story and was drawn in by your description, so I decided to give it a shot. I'm glad I did because it's been a while since I last read a SHINee fic that didn't make me want to press the Back button on my browser, for several reasons I shall not list here because we're going to take a while if I do XD
Randomness aside, I will go ahead and say that I really, really like this story. It's my first time coming across a story surrounding hairstyles/having various hairstyles serve as the backdrop for the main characters to tell a story, albeit unobtrusively so that one doesn't get sidetracked from the bigger picture of things. I find it a nice touch for Minho to attach a memory to each hairstyle during the course of the story, whether it be a sad or a happy one; I could almost imagine his heartbroken face when she plaited her hair during their breakup. You can't really blame him for feeling that way since he already associated her braids with the happiest day of his life during their relationship, poor guy T_T
On the lighter side of things, I was shocked when she fell down the stairs after colliding with Minho and thought something was going to go wrong from there; thankfully nothing did, and I think that's when the friendship really started, so I was happy X3 I could also imagine Minho's horror when he met her for the first time at the cleaner's, with that untamed mane and thinking he wouldn't end up with someone like her, only to proven wrong in the future XD But one scene I liked the most was when Minho asked her to be his girlfriend when they were hiding behind the trash can XD It's weird, I know, but for me, him popping the question at the most unlikely of places just gives it a realistic touch; I mean, sometimes you have all these grand plans about proposing and such, but something happens and nothing works out the way you want them to ^^;;
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