Captivated

Description

It's hard to wait around for something you know might never occur, but it's even harder to give up when it's everything you want. Persistently pursuing the delusional fantasy, yet holding back the judgments that slowly make its way to reality. Watching someone from a remote detachment, extending out your hand, hearing the dewdrops of rain hit the impassive cement. Turning away to wipe those tears which once harbored love for your loved one. Listening to your heart descend into the torrents of agony, crushing those illusions which concealed faith. Whispering those soft incomprehensive words, hoping to console yourself, desiring to pull away from the darkness you once descended in.  it hurts so much more, to witness the denial of your affection. The second our eyes meet, your heart skips a beat, the world has stopped in its tracks, there’s no one else, just you and me.

Foreword

^___^  its my 3rd fanfic i've posted up~ yay~ its going to be slightly lengthy (hopefully not).. im brainstorming my ideas at the moment and im getting inspiration for my fanfiction from various other angsty fanfics~ im going to extend this fanfic to an angsty storyline (spoiler XD)

please enjoy my fanfic~ ^___^ remember to leave criticisms and compliments in the comments column below~  ;D

Last, but not least, ENJOY~!! *___*

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superelf0809 #1
@mushroombaby12
thank u for reading and subscribing~ >__<
Chapter 2 is on its way~ :) hahha XD Yuuuuppp Eunhyuk is going to be one real cruel monkey here~ XD
common-time
#2
Heyy!! New subbie!! I like where this is going~ Eunhyuk... Ur a cruel monkey...
superelf0809 #3
haha, yup its not Eunhyuk~ ^^
superelf0809 #4
@Rirakuma: ^_^ thank u for ur criticism :) i'll break the blocks of paragraphs into short sentences, i appreciate your suggestions, keep them coming~ :) and, thank you for reading ^^
slyferris
#5
Curses I just read the authors note that it's not Hyuk, dshfahlgf :(
slyferris
#6
Why'd you walk away Hyuk ;_; That better be him walking up to Donghae in the club!

My only criticism is that I think that you should space out the writing a bit more like at the paragraph that starts 'The chestnut boy,' I think there should be a break somewhere in the middle of the paragraph because it's a big wall of text and is a bit hard to read.

Other than that, good job, I like the story and I'm looking forward to your next update! :D
superelf0809 #7
^___^ thank u~ i'm writing my fanfiction at the moment, hopefully i'll be updating next week or so :)
slyferris
#8
This looks good! :) I'm looking forward to seeing an update.
superelf0809 #9
no comments yet? ;___; plz.. no silent readers ;___;