story; chasing bees

author; sylvia plant

link; chasing bees

where should i even start? by reading the title, i had no idea what kind of story i was getting into. chasing bees is an extremely original title that i haven't seen anywhere before. it's pretty yet interesting, because who chases after bees? we all tend to run away from them.

the description is pretty good as well, it's not too short neither too long, just enough. however, when you say ``What started simply as girlhood crush on her neighboor turned out to be something that would help  Tzuyu understand who she truly was.`` all the verbs are in the past tense aside from would help, which kind of disturb the flow, in my opinion.  Would help is the conditional present. I think it'd sound better if it was ``What started simply as girlhood crush on her neighboor turned out to be something that helped Tzuyu understand who she truly is.`` also, in the same sentence``[...] something that would help Tzuyu understand who she truly was.`` I'd put the was in the present tense, because it helped her understand who she is, she doesn't change, I don't know how to explain that, but she's still alive and she's still herself. It just sounds more smooth to me to say ``[...] something that helped Tzuyu understand who she truly is.`` As for the second sentence, I don't seem to understand what you mean by in on her... Nonetheless, i really do like the description because it makes me wonder what kind of person Jeongyeon is and how Tzuyu's crush on her helped her, Tzuyu to accept her own herself. 

i really like the preview of your story and the fact that you mentioned what inspired you to write this story and how it's your first time writing romance (trust me, you did justice to it!) 

as for the story itself, i have to be honest and say that the 8 years gap did suprise me a lot. i thought jeongyeon would be dating a minor! i've seen a couple of japanese movies and series (about teacher/student romance) and the doesn't seem to be taboo over there. i'm not against it either, but the thought of a 19 years old girl dating a pre teen did shock me a little. i have to admit that it is very brave of you to write it.

what i appreciated in chasing bees is how jeongyeon didn't confess her love to Tzuyu when they were young. Tzuyu was barely a teeneger and jeongyeon let her discover herself. she didn't force her feelings or did anything to initiate a relationship other than friendship. having Tzuyu confess, a couple of years later when she was older and at an age to understand things better (and when she was sure of her feelings and herself), was truly a smart idea. after all, she seemed to be confuse about what love truly is when she was younger...

another thing i've liked in chasing bees is how you kept things realistic about Tzuyu not knowing how to speak korean when she