This is one of the very first drafts I made...
So the narration might be a bit off >///<
I did try to modify but wish not to lose the feeling I wish to convey while writing this
Had been quite a long time since I updated, hope u all would like it <3
Chapter 3: I enjoyed reading this. I like the repetition of phrases in paragraphs, because it really shows just how unexpected Yongsun's life turned out to be with her falling in love with Byul. The use of spacing between paragraphs and even within the paragraphs themselves is really good in setting the pace in this story. I like the last paragraph.
Chapter 2: If someone would scream like that, then for sure... someone would get heart attack.. XD
But, ah Byul... no matter what, but Yongsun gonna do as she wants.. just accept it...
Thank you for update and please, make them longer.. ^.^
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