Chapter 1: It is nicely written although it needs more improvement. The flow of the story is great but it is lacking, it would be helpful if you put more descriptions or put on emotions on the story to make it more..interesting and full of life.
Ex: His eyes glimmered in the darkness, scanning the people around him with scrutiny. They knew nothing about him. How can they act as if they were close friends? He took a deep sigh, it was heavy filled with remorse and annoyance.
Anyway, It's still great. You can continue writing it!
Good Luck!