Falling in Love wasn't part of the Contract

Story Title [3/5]

So it is good BUT it way too straight forward and also way to predictable. Just by title I could know what will happen in story it self. You need to add more of a spark to it.

Like “Rule 3: Personal feelings are forbidden.”

That’s just one of the many ways how you can change it.

Foreward and Description [7/10]

So a bit too much information on Descritpion. You could delete some parts like already revealing about Myungsoo’s secret girlfriend. You could keep it bit of secret. In foreward part I like that you added some peace of story BUT I would like if you would add some character info: Pictures, character features, peace of their personality.

Poster/Trailer/Background [3/10]

Mianhe but poster is fail. I mean it is way too bright and it is super hard to see characters on it, I can hardly see the quotes and who made poster and story doesn’t stand out much.

As for Background it is too filled up. Something simple would be way and a lot better.

General Story Plot [11/20]

The plot was good and you used it good, that’s why I give you 11 points BUT it is not original. I mean you can find at least twenty other fics with the same plot and idea. As I said you used it good but there a lot of parts where you could have made readers more excited as well as make different event take place, because what you wrote is just so predictable.

Character Portrayal [7/10]

I love how you portrayed everybody but Myungsoo. I mean you said he is cold and cool but to me he seems like typical teenager who is bit arrogant, no coldness and bit of coolness.

Grammar/Spelling [15/15]

Perfect. Finally place where I can give high mark. Good job.

Originality [2/10]

NOT original.  As I said before I can find way too much fics with the same plot and idea. Also all the events that took place are so predictable. And I mean EVERYTHING. You need to use more of a time to think of something more original and unexpected, something that would surprise readers.

Captivation [2/5]

I have to say to no, and it is because of the not well done poster and way too predictable plot.

Flow and Entertainment [2/10]

Seriously I needed to make me finish this fic with force. I usually do reviews in one hour but this asked me a lot more. I just couldn’t make myself to enjoy it and that is because of the plot, idea and many other things.

Bonus [1/5]

Your grammar and spelling.

Total [53/100]

Note: Seriously please fix your poster, background, bit of foreward as well as your thinking. In order to make this fic you have think like you usually don’t. Good luck and if you will want for another completely honest review, just either contact me true 1995dark or in the shop.

Done by juja1995