Whatever you wish, I'll give

Description

Minho wants an ideal girl, someone who's perfect and beautiful in everyway after his breakup with his girlfriend, Krystal, whose not worthy enough. This person should be talented, charming, pretty, and most important of all, make him happy. In other words, perfect 100%. But no person on earth will ever fit into all of those terms, much to his dismay.

An answer to his wishes comes in a snow globe...

Characters:

Minho:

Attends Seoul school and hones for a perfect girlfriend. Broke up with Krystal which causes a rift between them.

Yoona:

Loves Minho and he likes her back immediately. Patient, kind, beautiful, intelligent, and gives Minho whatever he wants. Her true past is unknown.

Krystal:

Dated Minho, then Minho ended the relationship harshly. Holds it against him

Taemin:

Minho's best friend and later on, Krystal's confidant.

AN: I would put Yuri instead of Yoona but I figured Yoona's more of the ideal girl type.

Foreword

"You're not really doing it right. It's suppose to be "I love you," said Krystal, pronouncing the english words correctly. Minho smiled but it didn't reach his eyes. After all, it wasn't really right  to pick on someone's english. Especially after they were trying to express their love.

"...and thank you!" She said, smiling. And that doesn't make up for it.

"Yeah, well...thanks." He wondered if she'd catch the edge in his voice. She kept on smiling and walking along the path. He wish that Krystal would catch a hint. He was considering what to give to her for Christmas and now, he wasn't sure if she deserved any. All the same--

"Is there anything you'd like for Christmas?" It was actually October he knew Krystal liked to plan ahead.

Krystal kept on walking and holding Minho's hand.

"Use your imagination. Although I'd like a new pair of ice-skates to use. I want to skate on the lake. Ah, we're here." Krystal stopped at the mall.

"We went there yesterday." Minho held back a groan.

"You're the guy, you're suppose to arrange the dates. And there's no where else I could think of. Every other places are closed."

With Krystal, every day is boring. Their dates aren't original and he wished for someplace more exciting. There were times when Minho wanted to do something else rather than hang out with Krystal. Because it wasn't just the dates that he had a problem with, it was her. She was too proud and a bit vain of herself, especially her english. She was pretty, he'd give her that. But Minho thought that she should be a little more humble.

So that was why he ended the relationship.

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Typewriter #1
Please update soon! The suspense is killing me!
shiro_cat
#2
I'll try to make Yoona appear soon, thanks for your big comments. XD<br />
btw, I think it's alright as it wasn't in first pov. <br />
Keep reading!
Triple-Key
#3
Wow, I really like this chapter! Krystal's character was quite realistic; I can imagine someone being that jealous so as to drop the thing that has been holding a certain person's attention, but she is so snobby when she snitched on MinHo that he hadn't been 'concentrating' on his work, LOL. Ha! Serves her right. I'm curious when YoonA is going to appear, the girl of his dreams awaits him...<br />
By the way, you had inadvertantly switched POV's LOL, haha~ that happens to me a lot too when I'm writing~<br />
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Update soon! :DD
shiro_cat
#4
imyoona_islove: Thanks. The thing with Krystal is that she's jealous that Minho's giving his attention to his snowglobe and not her. He doesn't even look at her.
imyoona_islove
#5
your story is really good! :D cant wait for yoona<br />
to appear ^^ hehe.and whats the matter with krystal<br />
uh? --'
Triple-Key
#6
Hmm, everyone's reviewing... I might as well join! xD<br />
Well, I honestly think this chapter is fine. It's only the first chapter anyway, so I don't think it matters that much that it is a little slow. Actually, I don't think it is at all. This chapter did serve its purpose, after all. MinHo buys a strange snowglobe that no one's ever taken interest in, and for some reason, I'm imagining YoonA coming out of that like a snow genie... alright, that was lame xD Your writing style is great by the way, topped together with your descriptions and I wouldn't worry about having to reveal the questions raised by paintedwings, because I know that'll be clarified soon enough. It IS the first chapter, you don't want to reveal too much at this stage.<br />
update soon :D
shiro_cat
#7
thx so much! I love reviews!
---BaboMich #8
Hi! I'm here to review your story, just like you wanted c: <br />
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First of all, your plot is simply adoring and amazing. I've never read anything like this. Snowglobes that can grant your wish? Simply amazing. Normally, it's either the classical lamps, earrings, necklaces, paintings, etcetc. So your plot definitely drew me in.<br />
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Secondly,<br />
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" Even though he'd already prepared his gifts for his family and all his friends and has no desire to buy anything when he doesn't have a girlfriend anymore, Minho couldn't help but join Taemin into the gift shop where the gifts and lights decorating the room would astound him. "<br />
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This sentence. Too long. Waaaay too long. Try removing the 'and's, and switching around and adding some words. I think it'll be way better if you do that. Ridiculously long sentences, in my opinion, tend to get confusing half way.<br />
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Grammar, punctuation, and spelling, I'll give you a 9/10 altogether. <br />
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Other than whatever I said above, there's nothing else to say.<br />
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Good luck with your story c: !
Vicky_Zeng
#9
hehe... hwaiting! :P
minyoon17
#10
keep on working on the story hwaiting~