I'll Never See A Rainbow Again...

Description

We're told our future lies in the hands of fate, but are we always told fates true course...

Foreword

This is a one-shot I wrote to try out writing in 1st person so please be gentle ^^;

I know the description isn't very good but I couldn't think of anything for it so I'm sorry about that.

I wasn't sure if I was going to post this or not but I think I'd rather have feedback with the chance of critisism if it helps me improve ^^

Thanks for reading!

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KYUriouself1423 #1
Chapter 1: Annyeong authornim^^
I like your choice of words. The words you used here in this story clearly makes a vivid scene in my head :) the plot is also good, I suppose this is not an ordinary plot. :) However, I think you could give more dimension to the character by introducing them further before they actually "move" through the story. Nevertheless, I appreciate this. Thanks for sharing a wonderful story. :D :D :D
kiddcrazy #2
Chapter 1: Wait.. what? They send him to a camp to fix his love for her? And they held a funeral for him???? A funeral for a living person? Wtf?
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