Chapter 12: Woah this chapter is longggggg~ I'll take two days to read this I guess since I have school and stuff so XD
Btw I love your new poster it's so cute and attractive~
Anyways thanks for the Ongniel Chapter :))
Chapter 12: I'm going to leave a comment first before I read because I need a whole day break to finish this lengthy chapter (AND IT'S ALL ABOUT ONGNIEL SO I NEED A PEACEFUL ENVIRONMENT TO LEAN ON)
Anyway, I really love your new layout! So cuuuute ><
Chapter 12: DID YOU JUST GIVE ME 17,000 WORDS + OF ONGNIEL AND BEAT MY RECORD FOR THE LONGEST CHAPTER?! I think you did wow. I'm deffinitely going to read this week but I think it might take me a bit of time to read it twice and then sort out my thoughts for a comments. I took a peak at the beginning, saw flashbacks, and then now I'm sure that I'm going to be awhile to write a comment. No wonder you've been too busy to read my updates lately~ I hope you get the time to check them out but if not, that's alright. I know you'll get there eventually whenever life settles down. Good luck on your trip, I hope it's fun at least!
Chapter 11: I know it's weird but I really love this chapter! And for Jinhwi's first kiss.... I'm squealing hard!! (to the point that my mother asked me if I'm sick or getting possesed by someone ugh okay Mom you're weird) Too much fluffiness that I can't handle!
For 2sung's short moment, I loved it also, I hope you make more moments of them (lowkey whispers, Minhwan moments too jebal), and special thanks for Ha Sungwoon's soju to made Daehwi being a drunk cutie XD
Is it weird that I imagined Daehwi to be y and hot cutie when alcohol had spread to him? Just look how stare at Jinyoung with those y eyes and-- Okay this is enough I want to slap my conscience for thinking too much about "y Daehwi" /giggles/
Did you just said "hot Ongniel chapter" will be next? I need to compose my inner Ongniel feels before I read that XD
Chapter 11: ong mah gawd that was a rollercoaster (monsta x song plays in head) of a chapter askfhsadjlfhsdhfjdsjkfh this is like the best deephwi ive ever read (cuz sadly no one really focuses on deephwi) ur chracterization is SOOOOOO GOOOOOOD so like 1 of my fave youtube vid titles is lee daehwi is a girl group supremacist and i feel like daehwis emotional expression exemplifies girl group songs so well, like that cute number association would be great lyrics and how hes exceptionally competent at the balance of understanding but not prying into others emotions, like the pace at which he lets baejin reveal his jihoon feelings, and balance of containing and revealing emotions, cuz i think that #wasted accident was the right amount to loosen his borders without coming off as too desire driven... k not good at describing characterization but YAY NO DAMSEL DAEHWI IN DISTRESS altho ur relationships r so not cliche i wouldnt have minded, was even hoping for prince baejin charming, but haha classic defense and hehe did jihoon toss the neon green lace or neon pink laced shoe at taejoon? hehe winkhwi and panjin reconciliation and woojin die-hardedly joining the maknae romantic/platonic relationship web hehe i love maknae line dynamic so off track LOVE DAEHWIS CHARACTERand baejin not being as clueless to him cuz so delighted theyre the 1st solid relationship, panwink may be otp but its kinda cute keeping them as cluelessxclueless, omo when ongniel returns to the scene ill inplode, ur vocab is so beautiful omg cloy svelte and always u maintain such a perfect balance of dialogue and nonverbal, romance and humor, oh yeah love when jisungs sassiness shines without ongs gag addition xD
Chapter 11: Yeah for Jinhwi's kiss ! I'm so happy for them.
Daehwi : He finally got what he wants and maybe more because he stole Jinyoung's first kiss.
Jinyoung: I'm happy he found a way to forgot Jihoon. And Daehwi is so cute he will fall for him easily I think.
Chapter 11: I loved this chapter! I read it last night but I wanted to sit down and write out a comment on the computer this time rather than my phone. I said before that I really like Daehwi's POV. Daehwi I just feel for so much more. I can connect with his intense love and his growing frustration. I can't believe how many times Jinyoung said Jihoon's name after he already determined to get over him and try to like Daehwi.Ew~ I wanted to bop him on the head with one of those big squeaky toy hammers. The whole idea of Daehwi counting was interesting and sweet. I could see him doing something like that. Especially at the end I like when he's counting their hugs and kisses etc hoping that the numbers would eventually increase.
I was glad to see that you really did make their relationship progress fast. It somehow really works with them. Making it a drunk kiss that they both didn't regret was great too. I think that is more reasonable what would happen since Daehwi is having a hard time bringing up his feelings normally though Jinyoung gave him a lot of openings. I'm glad to see that Jinyoung is really starting to like Daehwi beyond just attraction. I bet that Jinyoung would start to love him if he actually knew the extent and length of Daewhi's true feelings. I couldn't believe when he almost got . I hope Jinyoung meets that guy later and gives him a good punch or another ball kick so they fall off this time. Sadly, Daehwi's pretty enough that kind of thing could have happened to him in America T.T
I loved the little hint of 2sung here and there, last chapter and here. Seems like they're really attached and playful with each other. That was sweet what Daehwi said about Guanlin. I didn't realize they were that good of friends and that Daehwi knows everything about the other. It felt kind of like he was selling Guanlin as Jinyoung's new best friend haha. I hope that Jinyoung changes his mind about Guanlin and they do eventually become close friends. You made Guanlin seem even more amazing and strong of a person by having his friend talk about him. I think Guanlin is such a humble guy so when he talked about his family before, I didn't really get that. It must be hard for him, poor thing. He's got such strong will and sound mind and confidence/guts where it really counts. Obviously he's the main in this story and most important character so there's bound to be more of him, can't wait~
That confession moment and those kisses/drunken moments though! They were really the high light of the chapter for me. I love their cute, sweet, awkward, playful dialogue. They remind me of how I was when I first started dating. They are so cute and right for each other. And when Jinyoung is with Daehwi there is a lot less teasing and confusing misunderstandings and drama, which I think is good for him. I squealed a lot when Daehwi kept asking for one more kiss, he reminded me of a begging puppy~ Poor Jinyoung though, controlling himself with that y fluffball throwing himself at him and being all cutsey, that must have been really tough. Plus, sleeping in the same bed, who knows what funny things happened there that Daehwi was unconscious for hehe.
Great chapter, truly! I'm going to be reading your whole story again later because it's just so fun. I read the Ongniel parts again last night hehe. One, because I miss them in this story with their mentionings but no-one knowing what the hell is going on with them. Two, because their plot is quite complicated so I was trying to sort through things in my mind by reading between the lines and conjecturing about their connection. And I came to the conclusion, Daniel KNOWS about Seongwoo and Seongwoo doesn't know about Daniel, but how could he not recognize the love of his life? Daniel didn't look much different as a kid honestly. Dum dum...Can't wait for their chapter, I kind of hope for a long one since they've been totally missing the last two chapters.
Chapter 11: It is 11:19 pm rn and im here in bed fangirling my heart out to this chapter. PanWink is my favorite but dang this chap got me switching OTP lanes faster than BTS Cypher raps. I love you and this story so much. Thank you~~~ ♥♥♥♥
Chapter 11: Seriously thank you so much author-niiimmmmm, you had just made my daaaaayyyy!! :'D honestly before i saw ur update, i'm in a super total bad mood because my boss just added some impossible amount on my workload (which already hectic) so while i'm doing my job with a sour face, i accidentally open aff and YOU MAKE ME SMILE AGAIN. One biggest point that i really like the best from your story is your strong plot and storyline, you gave us readers different perspections (i mean point of view) in the same situation which make it more realistic! This is not easy but you seriously write very well, even despite your busy life and college :') Jinhwi is supeeeerrrrr cuteee and drunk daehwi is so adorable hahahaha, can you make him drunk again please? because he is totally adorable and jinyoung easily flustered by drunk daehwi! Gosh I love (drunk) Daehwi XD but wow i seriously never thought that taejoon have some kind of feelings to daehwi? i know it will make more things complicated on the future, woah i can't wait for ongniel the next and i also love 2park scenes, this duo idiot combo is so fun to watch and read XD Seriously, thank you for made my day, author-nim ur the best!!! *\(^^)/*
Chapter 10: That "JIHOON'S ABS FEATURING DAEHWI, JINYOUNG AND GUANLIN'S JAW ON THE FLOOR" moment xD, I'm the one of the fangirls who harshly hitting my friends until they lost their heads XD RUDE JIHOON
And for the s that keeps on backstabbing Guanlin, I'm gonna slash your throats with my fingernails (I'm just kidding ofcourse)
That lowkey Pandeep moment tho!!!! Not bad! They're both funny!
Nice chapter authornim~ So excited for the next update!
Chapter 9: ..... I don't know how to react on this chapter. I actually laugh and blushed when Ong strikes with his iness to Niel (MY NOSE BLEEDS FOR A REASON don't judge me) then I felt so sad when it comes to angsty part (Haechan you spawn of demon) I cried!!!!
I loved the way you detailed every part of this chapter, (that makes me confused because I at English grammar, big time, that I seeked help to my dictionary) this is so creative!
Let's back to Ong, I felt every pain he'd experience. Just like, in every laugh he showed, there's an extreme sadness that hid in his personality, I want to hug him to ease his pain through his life
Okay enough with this long talk lmao, my anticipation on next Ongniel story is getting bigger! And you did your job well authornim! Let me hug you virtually!!!!!
Chapter 8: Seonho's special participation in this chapter! XD Aww I felt bad about Jinyoung's feelings to Jihoon, and I actually felt a sting on my heart? (I actually experience this kind of pain when it comes to love HAHAHA) And the ending tho!!!!! I love it!
Wait. The next chapter will be Ong's spotlight right? RIGHT? :D
Chapter 10: I died! Literally. This is my ghost writing because you sent me to panwink heaven with this chapter! You turned Jihoon into daddy on stage, i just can't handle that. My poor winkdeep heart tho. I hurt for baejin so much T T anyways amazing creativity as always! I may have used my time to study so if I fail my exams Im blaming Kuanlin. ㅋㅋㅋㅋ Thank you for this chapter! I need strength of mind too! Kuanlin come be my strength! But lemme die again cuz of Jihoon's abs. T^T
Chapter 7: Dudeeeee, I always cracked up when it comes to Jihoon's iconic english line XD.
Too much feels flooded in this chapter, and I'm glad that Winkdeep reconciled and the love triangle between maknae line has started! (BONUS: It makes me shookt for eternity when Ong never failed to tease Daniel HAHAHAHA why do I have to mention Ongniel in every chapter, my poor Ongniel heart XD)
Chapter 10: Hey look at that, your chapters are approaching my level of novel status! HAHA. Sometimes you have all of these ideas you want to put in the chapter and then when you write it out you add more and more detail and then before you know it you've written over 10,000 words haha. I like it though because more stuff is happening. And I honestly love Guanlin's POV.
#1 thing I love in this chapter is the Panwink fluff all over the place. I can't believe it's only been two days for these couples. Panwink sure got really close in two days, I feel like they've known each other for weeks already. I like how they support, comfort, care, and fanboy over each other openly. Even Jihoon seems less shy now. All the touching, hugging, hand kissing made me squeal. They're really touchy-feely but it seems natural and believable because they obviously already are smitten and completely comfortable with each other. Still makes me feel bad for Jinyoung a bit, clearly seeing that and thinking how he's never been that way with Jihoon after years, but he's given up and decided to go for Daehwi so I'm sure his pain will be all gone soon. Anyway, really, Panwink were adorable in this chapter <3
#2 thing I love in this chapter is Jinhwi and Guanlin's talk. At first it is so awkward and funny then it is sweet and funny. I could see them eventually being friends and gossipping about the guys they like together. They're kind of unusually cute together. In real life, I feel like I don't see pandeep hanging out or talking much but they totally should. I think you grasped the essence of their characters really well here. Especially how they are awkward with each other yet still respectful and kind. It made me laugh and 'aw' a lot.
#3 thing I love in this chapter is seeing how deep and mature Guanlin's character is. He's pretty complex in this story compared to anywhere else I read him. But I completely agree with your analysis and approve of the family/rich background related angst. I hated to see him being bullied and how that puts so much pressure on him when he already feels inferior and unconfident, poor guy. He's still got a lot to learn obviously, but he also has a star quality, natural talent, and he's a hard worker. I hope that people in the school will stop bad mouthing him after seeing his performance. It must be really difficult for him. I can't believe how much Guanlin cried in this chapter. He really does never cry, I've hardly ever seen him looking sad even. Nervous, uncomfortable, unconfident, sure, but never like this. This poor kid, he really needs friends and love and support. How upset and stressed out he must be to have cried several times in this chapter. Or maybe he's just feeling emotional and liking someone has opened up that gate for his feelings to come flooding out more easily. Anyway, I felt my heart sting a bit every time he was getting teary and I really wanted to jump into this story and hug him and then bring Jihoon over quick to make him smile again.
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