HWB Review!
Author: ChickenLeader
A graded descriptive review by Angel110
Title: 10/10
I have to admit that for me as a second-language speaker in English the title was a little weird at first in combination with what I read in the description because I only know this kind of title in regard with a relationship. Now I know that it can be used for the kind of story you wrote, as well. The title suits your story and is interesting in combination with the description and not as cliché as I expected when I was given the request, so full score.
Description and foreword: 18/20
The description and foreword are clean and held plain, so well readable. The poll is not really necessary anymore but can stay. The description tells us very well what the story is going to be about but something is missing that would make me think 'Omg, I want to read this story so bad.' but it was still like a 'Sounds interesting, I haven't read such a plot before. I will give it a try.'
Character and character developements: 10/10
Good job on this section as no character you used was in any way unrealistic and I could comprehend every action that was being made, every word that was being said. I especially love the characterization and development of Onew. How he was trying to deny any feelings for Jonghyun but actually already being in the midst of falling for him and the mixture of self-coinfidence, shyness and embarrassment was perfect. Jonghyun was very well-written too, all the teasing was amusing me quite a lot.
Originality: 9/10
One point deducted because I have seen a lot of stories with someone suddenly being married to a stranger but I haven't read something like the rest of the plot line before.
Story line: 20/20
As I said I haven't read such a story line before, it's interesting, not cliché, there are no unnecessary scenes, no exaggerated characters. I don't have much to say here except for, great idea and thank you for sharing it with us!
Grammar and spelling: 10/10
A few typos here and there but nothing that I would deduct a point.
Flow of the story: 10/10
Again, I will keep it short: Not too fast, not too slow, perfect flow.
Overall enjoyment: 10/10
As you can see I enjoyed your story a lot and subscribed to it. I am excited to read more! Keep up the good work and try to advertise your story to get more readers because it's worth being read!
Total score:97/100
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