Winter Remnants Review
FIRST IMPRESSION:
12/12
12/12
The title aren't those kind of titles that you'd see everyday like "The Rich Boy's Girl". Titles like that gives away the plot too much. Your title was kept short and it described the whole story. I like it :) The description was kept short. I wouldn't mind. Because like you said, it is a one shot.
LANGUAGE:
28/28
28/28
The grammar is perfect. I didn't spot any errors. That's for sure. You used really good vocabulary. Mind teaching my little sis? She loves English. Just kidding XD
Anyways, your use of punctuations and your wide range of vocabulary impresses me :) You must've read that several times to make sure there was no mistakes.
STORYLINE:
34/35
34/35
The story's plot is really well written. It's unique compared to the other sad stories that I've read in AsianFanfics. I removed a mark because it was quite obvious that he'd pass away. Well, military is military. Also, you suddenly changed from 3rd POV to 1st POV. It's not a big deal though since you italicised it... So yeah... Just one mark down.
CHARACTERIZATION:
20/20
20/20
There was no Mary Sue, and I was really glad, since it's rare. Soojung stayed strong till the end and the description explained it all. Kai is a really caring boyfriend. I can really see that his love for her is sincere and he cares for her a lot. Character deaths are really saddening for me. But it's part of the story, so I have no choice but to accept that one of the main leads are dead (in the story). Nonetheless, the personalities of the characters and the development was completely okay :)
IMPACT ON REVIEWER:
5/5
5/5
I actually read this story with my sister. She ended up crying and now my pillow is soaked. I loved the story a lot. This is the highest review score that I ever gave. My sister literally requested for you to teach her good English. She's just kidding. Probably. The story was really nice :) Excellent work! :D
Total: 99/100
Reviewed by "Ji" ( MinHee_Exotic ) from Starlight Outlet
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