I need your opinion

I honestly know that this is kind of lame.
But since this is my first fic I need some honest opinion on it.

Will you guys read it and tell me your honest opinion.

Here's the story
Invisible Dusk

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ElizaLee #1 Dec 27, 2014 17:46:01

I find it quite good ^.^
It's just some of the punctuation. When writing you have forgotten to add a space after the comma ^.^

aniangel07 #2 Dec 25, 2014 14:36:35

I forgot: use tags that dicribe your story.
reading the first chapter, it seems like an angsty story? drama or something like that. so you should tag not jongkey only, but "angst" and "drama" or "tragedy" (if its one). yeah.^^

I hope I could help you.^^

aniangel07 #3 Dec 25, 2014 14:31:02

I took a look at it. :)

there are some things you should do in my opinion.^^

1. make it for members only, to protect yourself from plagiarism
2. tell your readers wich pov your write. when I begin to read I don`t know which person is telling the story
3. write a summery / description that sums up your story without spoiling anything, like a main statement or something
4. if you have more than 1 pairing in your story, write down the mainpairing (but its a jongkey story only, right?)

and for your first fic, your writing is good. :)