AUTHOR · Marianations

CHARACTERS · Jung Soo Jung (Krystal), Kim Jong In (Kai), Park Sun Young (Luna), Lee Soo Man (as Jung Soo Man), Song Qi An (As Seo Victoria), Wu Yi Fan (Kris), Other SM artists

STATUS · Ongoing

DESCRIPTION ·
Jung Soo Jung was just the typical South Korean chaebol: Wealthy, well educated, and seemingly perfect. Along with her social status, a varied range of responsibilities came along; she not only had to inherit all of her family's empire and manage it; but she also had to find a suitable husband for herself, someone with her same level.

But being a chairwoman wasn't what she really desired; so she decided to pursue her dreams of becoming a marine biologist in Zurich. As she had just finished a 6-month long relationship with her boyfriend, Wu Yi Fan, she thought it would be the best place to be at; a place in which she wouldn't have to worry about anyone else but herself.

But then, she wasn't expecting to find the love of her life there.

Someone who, definitely, wasn't her level.

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STORY TITLE (5/5)
I thought your title was really matched the story really good making the reader want to know what it's about. I really liked how you made readers think on why you've named that.

 

DESCRIPTION, FOREWORD AND TAGS (8/10)
Your description was good, but you didn't have anything genre in it, just a whole bunch or Exo & Fx tags. Try putting like romance, angst, Etc.

 

APPEARANCE (9/10)
To me, your graphic is just stunning.

 

CHARACTERISATION (9/10)
The characterization was perfect to me. Although I can't really say anything, but everything that's been happening right now seems to be good. I like how you made her a chairman, it just a change because it doesn't happen very often.

 

PLOT (19/20)
Your plot was interesting and your story was quite enjoyable. I really liked how you made Kai disappear for a bit, though when Kai disappeared, it was really hard to understand also, so just be careful with that.

 

CONSISTENCY/FLOW (10/10)
The flow was nice, I liked you how you took your time to got through everything and write it.

 

GRAMMAR, SPELLING AND PUNCTUATION (14/15)
Honestly, I read over this twice, &'i couldn't find any mistakes. At all, except for when you use the "-" and the "..." For example, sometimes you would use "-" and sometimes you'd use, "-"

Example, "-no, no , no..... Ill do if• is so complicated so I think if you leave it to, "...no, no, no- I'll do it." Is better.

So watching out for mistakes like that is all.

 

STRUCTURE (5/5)
You're structure and paragraphing is perfect and easy to read which I was glad.

 

READERS’ RESPONSE (5/5)
Your RR is pretty amazing. 10 Upvotes for 16 chapters, lots of subscribers, & they seem to love your story. You have comments that you reply to, good Upvotes, and good subscribers.

 

OVERALL ENJOYMENT (9/10)
This story was interesting and really nicely thought out. I'm pretty sure I'd like the read TOP one, one day.

 

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TOTAL: 93/100