TITLE: (5/5): Of Sunflowers and Poppies. It relates to the story really well and I honestly can't think of anything that would be better. It could be saying "a story of sunflowers and poppies," because this is one, isn't it?

APPEARANCE: (5/5): The poster and layout were beautiful. I could just be overthinking it, but the background of the green hills was referring to the beginning when the two were on a hill, right? And the pictures taped to the window. The layout was nice too, something you notice, but it doesn't take away/distract from the story at all.

DESCRIPTION/FOREWORD: (15/15): It was short, but I guess that's the point. It didn't say much, but this was a drabble and it said as much as possible. And it made me want to fgure out what it was talking about, since you didn't say much. Brilliantly done, I think.

PLOT/CHARACTERIZATION: (29/30): The plot was good and all, but it was honestly the writing that makes stories unique. This was the "same one is sick, they die" plot that you see pretty often (which is why I took off a point), but the way you wrote it makes it stand out. The characters were also unique. Though not much development can happen in such a short story, the characters still feel like real people and you do get to know the basis of their personalities.

I really did like the way it related to the title though. Because Amie explained the meanings of the flowers in the beginning and said that one represented death and the other life. In this story, Amie was a poppy, and Niel was the sunflower and that was just really cool and interesting.

GRAMMAR/ SPELLING: (28/30): The tense changes beween the parts. The first chapter is in past tense but the second is in present. There is no mention of a time skip, although Niel did seem to be portrayed as older in the first and last paragraphs in the second chapter (more on this under "flow"). There is one part though, "upon seeing who it was, she visibly relaxes". Your story (or at least the second part) is in the present tense, so the "was" should be an "is" right? Also, in the beginning, she says "Sunflowers and red poppies will do." The "will do" part isn't something people say normally, and it made me wonder what time period the story was set in since it wasn't mentioned. Your writing is really good though. I couldn't find many errors.

FLOW: (8/10): There was that one part in the beginning, when Niel first gives Amie the flowers. Weren't they just at the part when he asked Amie what her favorite flowers were (and why she liked them)? Also, at one part the font suddenly changes in the middle of her dialogue. I know for some people that might not borhter them, but if it's in the story and not for the author's note or at a pov change (Jodi Picoult does this) it's distracting. The way Niel is written in the second chapter makes him seem more mature, then it cuts to him and Amie in their not-as-mature days, so that was a bit distracting at first too.

OVERALL ENJOYMENT: (5/5): I just want to say right now that the second chapter, if done intentionally, was brilliant. (I'm pretty sure I already used that adjective but oh well.) The double spaces were intentional to signify a change of reality, right, so I thought about it a little more and I'm probably going to seem stupid with my next couple of sentences but it was something that I really liked for some reason. I get excited over the oddest things. So the scene with Amie in the second chapter, that was either a flashback to a time before when Niel visited her, or it was something that he imagined because the last paragraph was him looking at an empty room, right? The way he was written at the very beginning made him seem older than the first chapter and the middle part of the second. And that was like -flaps around-... Anyway...

I'm giving it a five because I loved it. However, I doubt I would reread it. While it was one of the best written fics I've read, I don't reread them often.

TOTAL: (95/100): Probably like a ninety five or something this was near perfect. [Oh, I was right, I have good guessing skills apparently.]