Moshi Moshi Everybody! <3 Taodaypanda here and today we're going to be reviewing "Movie's Over" by ILuvSkyDragon.

IKIMASHOO!

 

 

 

Story Title: 4/5

I don't think i've heard a title like this. Props to you for originality. The title can be interpreted in many different ways (e.g. the events after a movie's ending, the event that caused a movie to end, etc.), which is another reason why I like it. It sounds really good, but it doesn't give me chills. It's not eye catching (in my opinion), but I still do like it. It makes me think.

 

Foreword/Description: 7.5/10

I wish you could have added more to the description. "Junmyeon's movie is over" is very vague. If one looks at it in a positive light, "Are you talking about a movie he's watching? Are you talking about his own movie?" are the questions the reader will ask themselves, thus adding on to the mystery of the story. Of course this is just from reading this section. Your description goes both ways (bad and good). It just depends on the reader.

 

Plot: 10/10

I like how you're comparing Junmyeon's life to a movie in terms of the flashbacks. Synopsis: Zitao is the child, Junmyeon is the mother, and Yifan is the run-of-the mill father. Yifan is having an affair with his wife and it ends on a sour note. Ouch! The plot is similar to that of a Filipino Soap Opera's. It's not exquisite, but it did keep me wanting more. Excellent work.

 

 

Characterization: 9/10

The characters are fairly well developed throughout. As mentioned in the previous category: Zitao is the innocent child, Junmyeon is the caring mother and Yifan is the run-of-the-mill father one would see in a soap opera. Since your story is relatively short, I wouldn't expect any personality changes, so my expectations are met. 

 

 

Grammatical Structures and Vocabulary: 20/20

I didn't find any grammatical/punctuation errors in your story. This is the first time I've ever seen this in my experience with reviewing. The diction is also appropriate for a general audience, so...Outstanding work!

 

Writing Skills: 15/15

Your writing style borrows elements of realism, combines it with slice-of-life moments, and tops it off with hints of ambiguity/mystery. Your story is like a perfect dish one orders at a 5 star restaurant (forgive me for sounding objective).

 

Aesthetics and Story Flow: 10/10

In terms of the aesthetics, this story does the job at pleasing the reader (me at least). Each little detail in each chapter gives way to the bigger picture in the story (aka the ending). I can't elaborate any more on this.

 

Personal Enjoyment: 10/10

I am not a fan of mpreg stories, but I must say, the shining qualities in this story make it an exception. Along with the absence of grammatical/punctuation errors, the storyline and its structure truly make this story a diamond in the rough. 

 

Reviewer's Feedback: 10/10

One word: amazing. Truly amazing.

 

 

Total: 95.5/100 (App. 96%)

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Once again, your story is amazing. It's so amazing, that I'm featuring it!!! <3 I can't wait to see what you write next! :D