Guys do you think i should edit my story?

Feel free to read my story and give me some suggestions whether i should edit it or not

If i'm going to edit it, I'm going to edit the whole story. Making it into another different story.

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/615223/royals-lovestory-you-arrangemarriage-kimwoobin

I really really need you guys suggestions

Cause i don't think my story is good Enough

So i hope you guys gave me your suggestions on whether to edit it or not :) :)

 Thank you :) :) :)