Designer Wars

I will start of by saying that this story is very original. I haven't read anything similar to this yet on AFF and maybe it has been written before but I bet what the two of you have done so far is pretty original.

It is also very creative because girls love reading about fashion(or is it just me?) and for some reason I can never expect this kind of plot related to Exo but you pulled it off.

The foreword page is wonderful and like you said, the poster is beautiful.

I have to say having two different authors to write for one story is a bit messy. I can very obviously see the difference in writing style and technique. In the beginning, I found the writer who was writing for LV really good and I enjoyed reading it. It was an easy read and also your writing skills was good. The writer who was writing for Gucci was at first really draggy with parts and it was less interesting when compared.

With that said, as the chapters progress, I see the writer of Gucci getting better and better. It started to get really interesting and the flow of the story was no longer a problem so I want to congratulate you for getting better along the way. Now both the standard of the two writers are similar so the story will be less messy.

For me, the characters should be more developed by now. I know nothing of any of the Exo boys outside of their work at the two stores. The OC also do not have any interesting character development or backstory. It would be more interesting if something like this were to be displayed.

I found a few grammatical mistakes here and there that doesn't really stop me from reading it but it would be better if you go over it somemore.

Overall, I found myself enjoying this story although there were parts that could be improved to make it even better. I hope the two of you will continue writing this with the passion you started it with. This story could go places with more effort. Good luck!

SeasonsOfEXO ^^