Love started in 3...2...1... by krisber34

Story Title: (1/5)

I didn't like the title. I think you could have summed up Kyungsoo and Amber's relationship in one word such as rivals or frenemies. Something catchy and easy to remember that still gets your point across is ideal -- you don't want your title to be "I hate Kyungsoo because he is a meany idiot with smelly feet that once dated my cousin twice removed and broke her heart". A title like that very quickly loses the reader's attention. However, simply titling the story "Unexpected" (referring to Amber falling in love with the boy she hates) may catch the reader's eye. Titles are important because they are the first thing a reader will see when opening up your story. I thought the ellipsis (three dots) used in your title gave your story a rather messy, sloppy feel and just for that reason, your story would not have been something I would have clicked on.

Foreword and Description: (5/15)

The description is okay. Here's what I didn't like about it: the fonts were different every paragraph. You did provide a basic summary of your story but it was also confusing in some parts. If your reader doesn't speak korean, he or she would probably be wondering what the words noona and dongsaeng mean.

Readibility: (3/15)

I'm not going to sugercoat this - the grammar could definitely use some work. Confusing present and past tense makes your writing hard to understand. You repeatedly used ellipsis in places that didn't make sense.  I'd highly reccomend writing in a program that checks what you've written such as Microsoft Word to improve your grammar. In addition, the text in the foreward and author's note was in bright text of different sizes and colors which just hurt my eyes. That is why you got such a low rating in readibility.

Characterization: (3/15)

By having a list of characters on the first page, you leave no room for this information being discovered in the story hence no character development. You didn't give Amber the slightest flaw or quirk which made her very unrealistic. I also thought if you were to reveal why each of these boys liked her it would show more about their personality.

Originality: (5/15)

I've seen a lot of stories based on the idea of two childhood rivals falling in love with eachother but your story was unique in its own way. It didn't fall into any major cliches. 

Plotline: (10/25)

The plot had the potential to be very interesting and complex. A lot of drama could spin from the idea. I think you drifted away from your plot at a little though and some chapters were dreaded "fillers". To be more clear, you should ask yourself: What's the message I want my readers to get from my story? Do I want to leave a lasting impression? Or simply: do I want to entertain them?

Structure: (3/10)

The story progressed very slowly. It was nice to be able to see how the characters interacted with eachother but it was not neccessary for them to exchange remarks about unimportant things such as Chen's singing being really bad. Even though Chen's singing being really bad tells you a lot about him, you should not rely entirely on dialogue to develop a character. Little things count, too. Does Chen have a habit of chewing his fingernails down to their beds because deep down, he's insecure? Does Chen spend an hour fixing his hair in the morning so it's always perfectly gelled? Does Chen speak in a sharp, matter-of-fact tone of voice?