Title: 5/5 

The title is simple, not too long, not too short but give me a clue about the story that you are going to put a song about a sunflower. And it it true. Maybe it's just the 'Hymne' and 'hymn' which makes you kind of confused. But that's good because you make the title is interesting for me, and make me curioused to read. 

Description & Foreward: 9/10 

It's attractive to me, but somehow it's too short but doesn't really gives me a clue. For the forward you did a great job, means nothing because it was only the data for the story and the story contest.

Characterization: 14/15

I don’t know how to comment since it was only a one-shot that is hard for me to review your story. So it’s normal.

Plot: 20/20

Simple yet creative or based on fact and reality like what you said in the story. It happens in my life also about all those things that you bold. It’s like, it’s giving me a hint or telling me how to live as a good daughter. Ha-ha, that’s nice.

Flow: 8/10

Somehow it’s too fast. Same reason, it was a one shot.

Grammar, etc.: 18/20

I don’t think there’s something wrong with it. But only when you use ‘was’ or ‘is’.

Creativity of the story: 10/10

Actually in this section or segment, it was the same as the plot. But I will be more focused on how you tell us the story about what happen in your real life. And your story is somehow realistic. Sometimes it makes me smile by myself, remember how do I get angry with my parents, but regrets it when the boy is just playing with my heart.

Enjoyment: 10/10

I don’t know what to say.

Total: 94/100