Title (5/5) :

Both the titles fits the respective stories really well. I liked how it did kind of intrigued me. The titles are not totally original but I haven't seen much of them so it could be considered unique. It definitely will pull someone in to read it so good job at that.

Appearence (3/5)  :

I really love both your posters and it really is pretty. It is a little less angsty than I expect since your story mainly features angst so probably the colour shouldn't be so fluffy and light. 

Foreword & Description (10/15) :

For Love in Vain; Your description was interesting and it definitely shows readers what they could expect. I like your idea of it and it gives a mysterious feel to what we can look forward to. It was short but to the point so good job. For foreword, I have touched on this point time and time again when I do reviews which is Foreword is supposed to be somewhere you tell people about your story in forms of backstory, interesting tidbits of character or a prologue or snippets of the story itself. This would be a great way to show readers what to expect and make them want to continue reading. If you just use it as an A/N, some readers might just look over the story.

For After Love; Again your description is vague but intriguing so good job at that. Short and simple. Good touch with the song added into it since it fits the story well. For your foreword, the same thing as what I write above. You can use it as a A/N but maybe add some flair into it before it.

Characters (12/15) :

In both the story, the characterisation wasn't really clear. All I know is they like to play games, I don't really read much about the base of their relationship. The character traits are overused since I have read about it numerous times. There weren't anything that made them stand out. It would be better if he showed some more vulnerability in front of her or other people and the Gyuri open up a bit more since she was just pushing everything away. Until now, I still can't see if this two characters really loved each other anymore since it seemed it was just for the comfort of it.

Plot (15/20) :

I felt like the plot started of promising but then it just turned into one of the cliches. It wasn't really that original but their are some creative parts that I enjoyed like the games they play. Also, there were parts where it was draggy and parts where it was too fast. The starting was good and strong, middle was a little bland but readable and the ending was just rushed. Since I am reviewing both of it together as one, I think you should edit out some parts that aren't necessary and maybe tweak the ending a bit so it flows better.

Flow (8/10) :

Coming to flow, in most part the flow was alright but then suddenly it jumps to something else. There are also parts that confuses me and I had to reread to get because it wasn't explained yet like the whole cheating business. Overall, the flow wasn't bad but if you phrase everything in order, it would make it an easier read.

Language (14/20) :

Your spelling and most grammar related stuff is not bad but there are a lot of tenses mistakes. You kept writing in both past and present tense which makes it confusing. Please only stick to one. Add 's' behind some words or 'ed'. Don't leave out words like 'has', 'had'. Your sentence structure also has some issues like you wrote in in a wrong order. Also some words are used wrongly. It seems like English is not your first languge so please hire a beta reader to help you improve since the story itself is quite enjoyable. 

Enjoyment (7/10) :

Although it was a typical break-up story, I did quite enjoy some parts enough to ignore the flaws. I don't mind reading this on a rainy day or when I'm bored but I suggest you fix it so that it would be easier to read. 

• Reviewer's note: Good luck in writing in the future.