Forevermore by serendipty--

Story Title: (5/5)

Perfect title, honestly this is a beautiful word that resonates well with your entire storyline. It sounds nice, very poetic-like and somehow pleasing yet sentimental to the ears. It gives off the impression of sad and melancholic, which enticed me to click on your story. It might seem cliché since there are other stories here with the same title as yours but I personally find it interesting and wouldn't hesitate to click on it if I was browsing for a story to read. 

Foreword and Description: (14/15)

With the description, I feel that it would only appeal to Baekhyun and Chanyeol fans. It's interesting and I think it's perfect for a oneshot but it doesn't do much. I guess it's kind of bland and not very alluring, though you did a very good job of not giving away too much. Your description does make the readers question what's going to happen, but it just feels as if only BaekYeol shippers would read it, but that may be your intention. As for your foreword, there's really nothing much to say about because it only consisted of your notes and credits. Usually, I suggest authors to put an excerpt or an introduction in the foreword to lure the readers in more but since your story is a oneshot, I think it's fine not to add them. 

Readability: (15/15)

Your story is readable to me. You did very well with the paragraphing and spelling, so good job. You also have no problems with grammar. Maybe my eyes have gone weird but I found no mistakes. There might be complicated mistakes a literature major would notice but I saw nothing, seriously it's perfect.

Characterization: (14/15)

I love how Chanyeol developed throughout the story, it was very nicely put. I can't help but love his character here, the way you just wrote about him; his emotions, his everything, it really made Chanyeol feel real. I especially love how you described his change towards Baekhyun. The latter was pretty much the same. You described his actions and emotions really well. I felt that both characters fit each other like a jigsaw puzzle, it's perfect. The only reason I docked off one mark is because I can't seem to figure out what Chanyeol is. I know that you stated that he's immortal, but how and why? I think a little explanation would be nice. Plus, immortality is not something that happens in real life, so his being is not something believable or realistic.

Originality: (15/15)

I've said this a few times in my past reviews, cliché isn't always bad. A story can be cliché but different is what differentiates a great story from a good story. Though the idea of immortality is a little common, you transformed your story into something completely different and it really blew my mind. Your story is unique in its own way and I like it.  

Plotline: (25/25)

I really love the plot; it really is a romantic angst that brings tears to the eyes. All the events happening in the story had something contributed very well to the overall story. The plot is so well thought and I love how the story ended, though it's pretty predictable. The twist you did to your storyline is great. I have nothing to complain about, I just love it.  

Structure: (10/10)

Beautifully done, the flow was simple and was constantly at a steady pace, nice and easy to follow. I like your writing style, it's great and works well with the story. I think you're good in keeping your writing style consistent. It's simple but descriptive in a good way. I honestly think you did great in this section.