〈 空灵 ETHEREAL REVIEWS 〉

Story: A Thousand You

Author: Divergin1004

Reviewer: SWAGKYU / KYUTEINSPIRIT

TITLE: 4/5

♔ I think that your title definitely relates to the rest of your story! I think that it's eye catching because it gives me a kind of chill and suspense. I'm not too sure if A Thousand You sounds correct? I'm not sure. Would "A Thousand of You" sound better? That's just my opinion! Otherwise, I think that your title is pretty creative because I haven't seen other stories with a similar title. Kudos to you for that! ♔

DESCRIPTION / FOREWORD: 9/10

♔ Woot! Very creative and suspense building foreword! I think that you did a good job on giving only a general idea of what topic of your story and it doesn't reveal that much of the story's plot. And the little poem thing on the bottom, it fits the mood very nicely and I think that it definitely allows the reader to feel that mood. A good foreword is built upon a few sentences that give off the vibe of the story and don't give too much information and that's exactly what you did! However, please make sure to spellcheck and fix your grammar because there was a sentence where it sounded a bit awkward and that kind of throws off the reader. For example, the sentence "And everyday, you past a person not having a bare thought on what they're like; their lifestyle; their character." It sounded a bit awkward because the word past doesn't refer to passing by someone but instead walking past or the past as in history. If the wording of some sentences were changed, I think that everything will be perfect! ♔

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT / SHOWCASING: 8/10

♔ I must say that the characters were very nicely described and developed as a one shot. You started off with introducing to the readers about Nam Woohyun and then bringing up Sunggyu after their breathtaking first fate meeting. I think that a good job was done showing just what kind of person Woohyun is and how down to earth he was unlike the rest of the citizens that live unlively. A good job was also done to showing how Sunggyu was a caring character. The only thing that I was a bit confused was about why Woohyun smirks a lot and why he got so furious when he caught the two guys doing couple activities. It's just a tad bit confusing in my opinion because does the smirk act as Woohyun's mask? I think other than that part, everything else was amazingly made to build up information that the readers can gather on the characters. ♔

APPEARANCE: 5/5

♔ Both the poster and the background aid towards enhancing the mood and it also provides an eye-catching image to the readers. I think that the poster helps the reader wonder what's going to happen in this story and it also is a very nice addition to the feeling of your foreword. Your font was nicely chosen and I like that there wasn't that many advertising on your behalf but only properly crediting other sources that helped you with your story. I want to say that the quote on the background "Another Human, Another Figure, Another Silhoutte" was very nicely chosen and keeps the flow of your story in tact. ♔

ORIGINALITY / PLOT: 20/20

♔ You know, it's super hard to come up with an orignal plot like this because so far, I think this is the only fanfic that I've read with this concept. Your idea is both fresh and also brings out another perspective to life.The plot overall was good because it created an overall feeling and a nice moral was provided in the one shot. Reading this fanfic was worth my time! ♔

FLOW: 10/10

♔ The flow of the story was nicely done because every event was placed in a logical order to help the reader understand and comprehend what was going on. The general tone of the story was also maintained so that helped a lot and it was nice seeing a fanfic for once that remembers to teach its readers a moral behind the story. Good job on the flow because it keeps the readers reading! ♔

GRAMMAR / SPELLING: 14/15

♔ I spotted in the foreword as I mentioned above that the sentence "And everyday, you past a person not having a bare thought on what they're like; their lifestyle; their character." sounds a bit awkward because I think that the word past should be changed to pass. Other than that, I think that everything else grammar wise and spelling wise is perfect! ♔

Personal Note: I absolutely enjoyed reading your story! I think that is was super creative and good job! I hope you win/won the contest that you entered because you definitely deserve that chance! Keep up the good work because I enjoy reading fanfictions like yours! Please credit and thanks for choosing us! c;