Gettin' Lucky Review

Title: 10/10

The title makes me laugh now that I’ve read the story because it’s called Gettin’ Lucky but poor Kris doesn’t actually get lucky and that is just sad and hilarious to me.

Appearance: 10/10

The only thing I could suggest with the appearance is maybe making the text a little bit bigger simply because it’s kinda tiny, but other than that nothing wrong here. I liked that you had the indentions for bits of flashback dialogue, it was a nice way of separating them from the rest of the story.

Description and Forward: 15/15

The description was perfect. Short, sweet, and gave the reader a basic idea of the story without giving away the hidden little details like why Luhan wants to help Kris get laid in the first place.

The preview in the foreword actually made me laugh at loud before thanking god – the gods, whatever higher power there is – for snarky Luhan, because the best Luhan is a snarky one that has no problems telling Kris about himself, in my opinion.

Characterization: 10/10

Your characters were solid from start to finish. Kris was entirely too awkward for his own good – which I thought was absolutely adorable, especially with what he’s trying to do the whole story – but had a good heart.

Luhan. Just…Luhan. Luhan was my favorite character because even when he was being a snarky – for lack of a better word, I swear – he was cute and flirty and managed to make Kris and I both choke on our drinks plenty on times in this story. And as I said at the beginning of this section, your characters were solid. There was a set personality for both of the main characters (And the side-characters like Yixing and Tao, so kudos to you.) that you managed to stick to the entire time while still giving them room to grow. And by them I mean that loveable little prude Kris.

Plot: 10/10

This isn’t the first time I’ve read a story about one character trying to help his friend get over a break-up in a not-so-wholesome way, but you did this storyline justice. Your characters and writing style gave the story a really nice and original feel and I loved it so much.

Flow: 10/10

Your story was perfectly paced. Not too fast, not too slow, and there weren’t any really bad grammar or spelling errors that made things seem choppy and halted the flow of the story.

Grammar and Spelling: 23/25

For the most part, your grammar and spelling were spot on, but there were a few instances where you switched tense or a letter or two got left out of a word. There were no big mistakes and the few that I found I actually had to really look for because I was too engrossed in the story the first time reading to notice them.

Bonus: 10/10

This story was hilarious and beautiful and I am so glad that I got this request because holy crap was it a good read.

Comments:

I normally try my best to have decent sized, insightful reviews to help the author out in absolutely any way I can, but this one ended up super short because there is literally nothing I can think of to improve this story any. It was amazing and I just loved it so much that it has been so hard not to just fangirl this whole review.