Title (5/5): The title is capitalized correctly and for a fluff fanfiction, it is great for it gives off that fun feeling.

 

Foreword & Description (9/10):

The foreword is good because you know that it is a place for "Author's Notes" and prolougues (most people mistake that).

Other than that, it's great! I like the pink theme. It is subtle and not that painful in the eyes. (And I adore the cat gif xD lol)

 

Plot , Twist & Flow (35/40)

(I put the 3 together because they’re pretty much the same)

It is cool and new, like a breath of fresh air. I haven't read a story revolving on cats point of view. Nothing happens much I guess, maybe it's a lighthearted novel. And well,it's fine.

The flow is okay cause you managed to keep the story going, without awkward change of scenes.

You also had a conflict going on already (the moment the cats were missing). So there’s a twist already.

Grammar/Spelling (16/25)

Your writing style is okay, the way you used compound-complex sentences (1 or more independent clause and 1 or more subordinate clause) is fine though it's a little bit confusing sometimes and I have to re-read the paragraph. You can use simple sentences (1 independent clause) once in a while just so you won't mess up your compound-complex style.

 

The grammar is good because I can still understand your English enough (unlike the others that made my nose bleed) though you have some errors that I have to point out.

 

Chapter 1

* If a paragraph is too long, you can divide it, just so it won’t be tiring to the eyes.

Like this:

Original:

Tiny, pink paws made soft clinking sounds on the wet pavement as they touched the gross water. A long, white tail with a cream-colored ring on it swished in annoyance as a cold raindrop fell on it, followed by many others. A soft, almost huff like sound left the small creature as it ran to find some kind of shelter, the rain soaking its longish, soft fur, making it look like some mutant from those almost scary movies. Finally, a place where human children liked to go appeared in the the small creature's sight, making it let out an almost happy mew as it darted towards it, its tiny feet bringing it towards the slide under which it would be safe from the drenching horror that humans called downpour. Curling up, the small animal looked as the raindrops hit the sand one by one, making a weird, muddy substance it hated a lot as it would always stick to its fur, making cleaning it very hard. But at least now, the small, white creature had a cold, but dry place where its fur would dry. It could only hope that the rain would stop soon. 

 

Corrected:

Tiny, pink paws made soft clinking sounds on the wet pavement as they touched the gross water. A long, white tail with a cream-colored ring on it swished in annoyance as a cold raindrop fell on it, followed by many others. A soft, almost huff like sound left the small creature as it ran to find some kind of shelter, the rain soaking its longish, soft fur, making it look like some mutant from those almost scary movies.

 

Finally, a place where human children liked to go appeared in the the small creature's sight, making it let out an almost happy mew as it darted towards it, its tiny feet bringing it towards the slide under which it would be safe from the drenching horror that humans called downpour. Curling up, the small animal looked as the raindrops hit the sand one by one, making a weird, muddy substance it hated a lot as it would always stick to its fur, making cleaning it very hard. But at least now, the small, white creature had a cold, but dry place where its fur would dry. It could only hope that the rain would stop soon. 

 

 

 

Original:

Tiny, pink paws made soft clinking sounds on the wet pavement as they touched the gross water, a long, white tail with a cream-colored ring on it swishing in annoyance as a cold raindrop fell on it followed by many others.

 

Corrected:

Tiny, pink paws made soft clinking sounds on the wet pavement as they touched the gross water. A long, white tail with a cream-colored ring on it swished in annoyance as a cold raindrop fell on it, followed by many others.

 

 

Original:

Well, cats - because that was what our little hero was, a small, long-haired white kitten with almost unnoticable cream-colored spots on its head and tail - had always hated water, hadn't day?

 

Corrected:

Well, cats - because that was what our little hero was, a small, long-haired white kitten with almost unnoticeable cream-colored spots on its head and tail - had always hated water, hadn't they?

 

Original:

Slowly, the sun had come out, the rain quietening down it barely seemed like it was falling.

Corrected:

Slowly, the sun had come out, the rain quieting down barely seemed like it was falling.

 

Original:

Putting its front-paws forward, the now elegant looking, though quite messy furred creature arched its back, stretching out its limbs that were slightly sore from sleeping.

 

Corrected:

Putting its front-paws forward, the now elegant looking though quite messy furred creature arched its back, stretching out its limbs that were slightly sore from sleeping.

 

Original:

Slowly, the cat walked out into the the mud that was drying luckily, a glimpse of disgust evident in its eyes as its tail swished a little nervously.

Corrected:

Slowly, the cat walked out into the mud that was drying luckily, a glimpse of disgust evident in its eyes as its tail swished a little nervously.

 

Original:

The small creature's ears twitched a little as it almost sank in the gooey substance, the fur on its legs slowly taking a dark brown color as it tried to leave the mud as quickly as it could, sometimes tripping over its on feet.

 

Corrected:

The small creature's ears twitched a little as it almost sank in the gooey substance, the fur on its legs slowly taking a dark brown color as it tried to leave the mud as quickly as it could, sometimes tripping over its own feet.

 

Chapter 2

Original:

This human was kind, not as weird as the other was, the cat had to realize as it gobbled down it's food, chewing on the chunks of meat happily. It was purring loudly, its tail swishing lazily as it ate.

 

Corrected:

This human was kind, not as weird as the other was, the cat had to realize as it gobbled down its food, chewing on the chunks of meat happily. It was purring loudly, its tail swishing lazily as it ate.

 

Original:

"Shh, it's okay."He said as he the cat that was trying to struggle out of his hands, yet hadn't attacked yet him yet as he sat down again.

 

Corrected:

"Shh, it's okay." He said as he the cat that was trying to struggle out of his hands, but hadn't attacked him yet as he sat down again.

 

So these are the errors that caught my eye. I noticed you got a beta on the following chapters and I can hardly see any errors, so yeah, that’s all.

Oh, I noticed that there are times you do not put a space after you use a quotation mark. (Or maybe you unconsciously forget sometimes especially when you’re busy. I understand that xD)

 

So that’s all. ^^

 

 

Comment/Subscribers 9/10

The number of subscribers is not stated so I don't know how to give the grade. But judging from the number of upvotes and comments, I think you're doing pretty well. ^^

 

Theme/Moral Lesson (8/10)

I still don’t get the moral lesson of the story since, I suppose, there’s nothing big happening yet  because it’s not yet finished. The theme I guess is learning what the inner thoughts of a cat are.

 

 

TOTAL: 81/100

All in all, you did a great job! God bestowed you talents in writing and you’re using it and not hiding it so keep it up and be grateful! I don’t know but I’m getting a feeling that something eye-tearing will happen or the finale will be dramatic. Also, I am not a pro or an expert but I’m glad I can help (even just a little)  and I’m sorry for the delay of the review (and it seemed you got a beta already-.-‘’’) because I was in a vacation and was taking care of my gramma. So yeah. Don’t limit yourself to what I just said. Go explore beyonf the horizons yada yada

So yeah, have a great day!