Title-  10marks

Characterization- 10 marks

Grammer- 15 marks

Flow- 5 marks 

Plot- 10 marks

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/298559/tangled-yongguk-zelo-bangzelo-bap-banglo

 

-Tangled-

 

1) Title. No punctuation or spelling errors! The title links to the story and for that, a 10/10 !

 

2) Characterization. You can try to make the contrast between the Zelo in the club and the Zelo at home bigger so that the story will be interesting. You can emphasise on Bang's feelings sometimes to bring out the fact that he is a main character. 7/10

 

3) Grammar. Up till the point that I read it, I did not spot any grammatical errors. Only some awkward sentences. 14/15

 

4) Flow. The relationship pace between Bang and Zelo could be slower. Sometimes when it's too fast it may seem too unreal. 3/5

 

5) Plot. I think the plot is quite cliche? Under aged boy sneaks out to club, meets guy. But the thing is that the guy is the boy's idol. Now that's what makes the story interesting. Then the guy asks the boy to perform with him! That's just another part of the story that changes the cliche into ORIGINAL. So... 9/10

 

43/50 YAY! I liked the story! I hope you liked the review! Feel free to correct my mistakes by telling me in the comments section below!