Title-  10marks

characterization- 10 marks

Grammer- 15 marks

Flow- 5 marks 

Plot- 10 marks

 

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/300254/we-found-love-in-a-grocery-place-bangzelo-bap-banghim-daejae-himup-jonglo

 

-We Found Love In a Grocery Place-

 

Firstly, I'd like to clarify that I didn't finish the story. Secondly, always remember that reviews are the reviewers personal opinion. LET US START ^^

 

1) Title. The title had no punctuation or grammar errors but it was a little long. I suggest that you can find a synonym for 'Grocery Place'? 

9/10

 

2) Characterization. The characters were quite well portrayed. I like the signs of nervousness that Himchan had and the way Jongup really felt that Himchan was weird even when dating. BUT. You made Yongguk and Junhong a fair big part of the story. I suggest that the details on Yongguk and Junhong can be minimally omitted. 8/10

 

3) Grammar. Some parts of the story have good grammar with no spelling errors or anything. But, there were little snippets of the story where there were mistakes in the grammar and spelling. I suggest you to either proof read it or have a beta do that for you. 10/15

 

4) Flow. This is a part of your story tha I like. This story's flow is gradual and natural. But there were some small places that some things were rushed like how Jongup got over Junhong. 4/5

 

5) Plot. The plot was unique and interesting. I have to say that the settings for the story was quite interesting. There were parts of the story that were a little redundant though. So for this I give a 8/10

 

Total: 39/50

 

Overall: I liked the story. There was room for improvement but don't let the marks et to you. Just as long as you improve on future writing ^^ I hope you win for the category!!