Story Title: The Bride Killer
Author: Moony_Kat
Genre(s):
- Angst
- Drama
- Horror
- Romance
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Brief Description: When fiction becomes reality, drama is bound to happen. But what about the killings that frighten the whole Seoul? What about all those women that had to get buried in their brides attire?
A story about the modern version of 'Jack the Ripped'. Or better said, an upgraded version of him...
Rated H: Yes
Reviewed By: EternalLove

1. Title: [5/5 pts.]
It was original and mysterious. I really liked it because it just doesn't sound like an everyday story you find on AFF.

2. Poster/Graphics/Background: [5/5 pts.]
The poster was amazingly scary. It wasn't just that, it was also beautifully designed, pretty and not too crowded. It fits well with the story. The background was plain, but it's dark and it looks great the way it is.

3. Foreword/Description: [10/10 pts.]
I found the forward and description to be both mysterious and enticing. I sensed dread and fear and it wasn't dull in the least. Fits so well with the rest of the story.

4. Plot: [25/30 pts]
It was kind of like any other horror story. I knew who the killer was from the moment he was introduced. I also knew what was going to happen a moment before it happened, but it was a good plot. I was wanting more at the end though. To see what happened after that and to see what happened after she opened her eyes. Surely someone else would notice before they close the coffin? It was well plotted out, but not the best.

5. Flow: [5/5 pts.]
The flow was not ok fast or slow. I didn't feel rushed when reading it.

6. Characterization: [5/5 pts.]
Characters were on the spot. They were just...great. Couldn't be any better. They're emotional when needed and subtle when needed. Great!! :)

7. Grammar/Spelling: [17/20 pts.]
The grammar and spelling wasn't much to complain about. Almost everything was exact. A few small wording problems and mis-punctuations here and there, but not enough to really notice first time around.

8. Overall Enjoyment/Entertainment: [18/20 pts.]
I liked it. There aren't many horror stories on AFF but this one makes me want to read more. I kind of wanted Na Rae to get revenge somehow if someone should discover her. I was also hoping "Krig" would die like in her comic but it's your story and it's great the way it is.
Comments/Feedback: The story was one of the best horror short stories I've read on AFF. I've always been fascinated with the Jack the Ripper story and you did it justice.

Total: [90/100]

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