Customer: Hyuklicious

Order: Is it Wrong to be Ugly? Review

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Title: 4/5

It's a bit catchy. Maybe because you put it as a question. It's not that interesting, though.

Foreword/Description: 6/10

For me, you put lots of things in your description. There are things authors should hide to make their stories interesting. Your description gave me hints of what will happen. In short, it became predictable. Nonetheless, I like the quote you put there.:)

Appearance: 7/10

The poster's okay. I just found the lower part messy. There are also some words I can't read. And about your background, I still don't get why you chose that pic.

Characters: 7/10

You're just on the 4th chapter so I can't say much about your characters. But I'm liking how they develop so far. I just don't get Minhae's personality. It's still vague but as I've said earlier, you're still at the beginning.

Plot: 9/10

I love your plot. It's pretty interesting, how Woohyun will help Minhae and how their relationship will end up. I'm expecting you to update with more exciting chapters.:))

Originality: 8/10

Although you've said that it's not the clichéd story about a fat girl, turning into a beautiful lad, with many boys falling in love with her, I find it only a bit original. But I know you can make this fic of yours more original. I know you have new ideas to put in your story. Even though it'll be a long, slow process, I'm sure the readers will still wait for your updates. A long, slow process means a well-written story.

Grammar: 16/20

I found a few mistakes, which is good.

'... one of the queenkas, Jessica shoved the piece of paper...'

It should be: '... one of the queenkas, Jessica, shoved the piece of paper...' Without the second comma, the sentence is senseless. It'll be a bit hanging.

 

'Anyway, I’m going to kill myself soon, I should do something worthwhile for once, right?'

It should be: 'Anyway, I'm going to kill myself soon. I should do something worthwhile for once, right?' You can simple separate them into two sentences since they have thoughts different from each other.

 

'Omygosh, I have a staker!'

It should be: 'Oh my gosh! I have a stalker!' It's still appropriate to write it the way it should be. 'Omygosh' is kind of informal.

 

'I used to be like you too.'

It should be: 'I used to be like you, too.' <--- For formality.:p

You're a Singaporean, but you know your English very well!:))

Flow: 7/10

You said that it'll be a long, slow process. But for me, the flow is just right. It's just a bit confusing since there are times when the POV suddenly shifts to another one, without you saying it.

Overall Enjoyment: 8/10

Four chapters... Not enough for me to enjoy it much. But I somewhat enjoyed reading it.

Comments: 5/5

You only have few comments but I can say that they're all waiting for your update. They just love your story.

 

77/100