The Other Side by MsKitten

Reviewed by Yana

Title (4/5)
It’s not very eye-catching but I love it. When I first saw the title, I immediately thought of the world of the dead.

Appearance (10/10)
Your poster and background is really nice. It gave a mysterious and angst vibe. Your font colour and size is perfect too, so I’ve no complain there. I also love the way you put Lee Joon, Bang Youngguk and Park Bom in every chapter, you used the suitable picture for the mood. 

Description & Foreword (10/10)
Your description is perfect! It made me want to know what really happen after her boyfriend die. Those whisper, the way you describe it gave me the creep. I’ve got nothing to say for your forewords since you put author’s note there.

Plot (10/10)
This is the first time I read something like this! And I really love it; it’s not a generic plot that I’ve often found in most story.

Originality (10/10)
Definitely an original! I’ve never read a story with Park Bom as the main character and this type of story before.

Flow (3/5)
I think the flow was a bit too fast with Joon and Bom’s relationship. I mean they’ve just met and she’s already letting him stay the night just because she dirtied his clothes. But after that the flow is fine. 

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (7/20)
There are many mistake in grammar and punctuation. You have some spelling mistake too. Your vocab is okay since you only use simple words, but I think you can improve your vocab more. Here are some of your mistake, there are some more, I just pointed some of them. For example:

Oh, I remember that day like it was yesterday. It was a rainy part cloudy day, and that day, was the day where I got colder, and my heart got harder. This was the day, I lost the most important asset known to a woman.

I think it would look better like this: Oh, I remember that day like it was yesterday; it was a rainy part cloudy day. That day was the day where I got colder and my heart got harder. It was the day I lost the most important asset known to a woman.

"Are you still there," I dropped the phone and I let out a loud scream.

It should be: "Are you still there?" 

I dropped the phone and I let out a loud scream.

Two years have gone by so fast that I'm not sure if even the calendars are right.

It should be: Two years have gone by so fast that even I'm not sure if the calendars are right.

"Jenny, where're here,"

It should be: "Jenny, we're here."

"There's nothing here but a river? Joon, what are we doing,"

It should be: "There's nothing here but river. Joon, what are we doing here?"

"You know where to find me too. How have you been Bommie since the last time we've talked,"

It should be: "You’ll know where to find me. How have you been Bommie since the last time we've talked?"

These are the days I get to sit back and relax with my wife and kids. I don't get to see them that much during the week. Jennifer and I both work hard during the week as our children go to school. So days like this, we take full advantage of.

It should be: This is the day where I get to sit back and relax with my wife and kids. I don't get to see them that much during the week since Jennifer and I both work hard during the week as our children go to school. So it was always day like this that we take full advantage of.

Writing Style (6/10)
Your writing style is too simple, but simple is good. However you might want to use more words that have greater impact. 

Reader's feedback (10/10)
All your readers seems to really love your story and I noticed some of them really like the choices of song that you give for each chapter.

Ending (-/5)
I’ll exclude this since your story’s not finished yet. 

Overall Enjoyment (7/10)
I kind of enjoyed it since it was my first time reading this kind of story. But I’ll cut the point a bit because I expect the will be a lot more creepy ‘whisper’ from Youngguk but there turned out there’re not that many. Plus, all the characters are not really my bias so I guess that made me lose interest a bit. 

TOTAL – 77/100