Infinitely Yours by silverline

Reviewed by Nicole

Title (3/5)
It grabs people’s attention…

Poster/Trailer (4/5)
I love the poster!

Foreword and Descriptions (6/10) 
You did well but careful! There’re several mistakes here!

Originality (7/10)
It’s actually quite original to me… Good job

Writing Style (8/10)
Your writing style is very unique… Keep it up!

Flow (6/10)
The flow is okay… Try improving it…

Plot (15/20)
I love your plot… It’s the first time I’ve gone through this type of fanfics… Great job

Grammar and Spelling (11/20)
Well… You have errors on your foreword too… Well I’ll help you…

She is working as A PERSONAL TOUR GUIDE
You can just ignore ‘for Taecyeon’ as the word ‘personal’ will be more exact… Besides, the readers will be curious about her job…

She used to be Taecyeon’S fiancée
You forgot your apostrophe…

Everything was fine before you came INto my life
I was fine. I admired him, I did my job as usual.
But then you CAME IN AND changed my life, my whole life.
I KNEW THAT you were here for her
I KNEW THAT she was the one who broke your heart
But why I doubted when my wish finally came true?
Why DID YOU APPEAR IN MY mind? - Suzy
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I never fell in love with another girl
I loved her. Only her
She was the only perfect girl in my life
And she broke my heart
Over the past few years,
I have been searching for the reason why she did it.
But when I found it, I felt nothing
ONLY A GIRL WHO IS FOUR YEARS YOUNGER in my mind
What happened? – Taecyeon
“You have to ask her, Taec. You can’t live like this,” Nickhun said while HE walked closer to Taecyeon’s desk. HE gave him a very deep-look. He folded his HANDS because of HIS FRIEND’S STUPID ACTIONS. Taecyeon always did stupid things if It was about love!
“Why? It ENDED..!” Taecyeon looked at Nichkhun’s eyes. He couldn’t believe it. HIS MIND COULDN’T ACCEPT NICKHUN’S WORDS. He would never fly to Seoul for someone who decided to leave him.
“THE SAME OLD LINES, PAL. But look at yourself, Taec. You WAITED for her call everyday. You hope THAT everything will be back. YOU WERE CRYING WHEN YOU think about her,” Nichkhun said sarcastically and looked at his friend. Taecyeon widened his eyes when the last word glided from Nichkhun’s mouth. It was true. And he couldn’t say anything.
“I don’t know anything about Korea. I don’t know where does she live and I don’t know HOW WOULD SHE REACTS WHEN SHE KNOWS THAT I CAME FOR HER,” HE said with HIS DEEP VOICE.
Nichkhun looked at his friend once again, AND shooked his head. He looked at Taecyeon and he HELD ONTO Taecyeon’s shoulder. He CLEARED HIS THROAT AND STARTED TALKING.
“Look, I’ve told your dad about this. We’ve bought a ticket for you. And WE ALSO HIRED a tour guide to accompany you when you’re there,” he smirked AND he walked out from Taecyeon’s room.
Taecyeon was SURPRISED. He couldn’t move anywhere. Nichkhun…you’re something
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Ending (-/10)
Since you don’t have an ending, let’s just leave this blank…

Total: 60/90 = 67/100

B : 60-74

Nicole's Note:
Well… Firstly, sorry for the late review as I have examinations going on… I’m sorry that I only corrected a part of the first chapter… But if you want me to correct the others, you can just PM me… I’ll help you out… I apologize if this review is too harsh on you… Well, good luck in your story