Once by rainxsky

Reviewed by ELF

Title: 4/5

Short and straight to the point. It's not very eye-catching though, but since I like shorter titles I only deducted one point.



Appearance: 3/5

Your background is boxy since it's a different color at the top and bottom, it wouldn't be that bad if it wasn't that noticeable but this is really obvious. You have a poster but the pictures don't really match each other, and the font is kind of hard to see. Your font and colors for your story are easy to read and didn't give me a head-ache so that's good.



Description/Forward: 8/10

Your description is short. As in one sentence short. That's okay since it's a oneshot, but I still would have liked it to be a bit longer. Your foreword is just an author's note which is fine with me. I do think that you could have put the definition that you put at the beginning of the first, and final, chapter into the description or the foreword.



Characterization: 10/10

Since this is a oneshot it's pretty hard to really get a feel for your character's personalities, but you get the general idea of who they are. Right off the bat we know Myungsoo is still a bit sad when remembering how his lover died but has gotten over the initial grief. He doesn't seem to have any regrets. Sung Jong is an adorable, and cheerful boy despite being sick. He's selfless in a way that he gives a bit of warning to others that his time is coming soon, without flat out telling people, "I'm going to die today." We don't get much about Sung Jong's little brother but he only makes a small appearance so that didn't bother me that much. 



Plot: 10/15
I've seen this plot before and it's a bit generic. But it's still pretty good for your first angst. You make the plot your own, because instead of having Myungsoo be a grieving lover that blames himself you made him a man with no regrets. 



Flow: 15/15

Your flow is just right for a oneshot. You give a bit of information from the past, and you didn't rush things. Good Job.


Grammar & Spelling: 23/25
Spelling was alright, I didn't see any mistakes there. Your grammar was good too. You knew when to put a comma at the end of a sentence when someone finished talking, something I sometimes have trouble with. The only thing that I saw was this sentence, "It was really ironic at how he would call Sung Jong his angel then, and now, he literally was his angel that was watching him from up above." I think the comma after "and now" was useless. Other then that everything was fine. 



Writing: 5/5

I like your writing style. It's nice. You're descriptive but not to the point of where we're reading a full paragraph about the way Myungsoo felt. It's good.



Enjoyment: 5/5

I enjoyed reading your story! This is the first Inifinite based fanfic I've read. I enjoyed it a lot.



Bonus: 5/5

Just a little bonus for good-work and my enjoyment. Plus you're my first requester!

Total: 88/100

ELF's Note: Good job! I'm sorry if I'm a bit harsh in this, but I hope you find this informative and helpful! You're my first request! Yay!