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Hyuna X Hyuseung : It was our very last "TroubleMaker" performance. As the crowed screamed and yelled "TROUBLEMAKER! TROUBLEMAKER! HYUNA AND HYUSEUNG!" Hyuna and I sighed as we walked off the stage. "Oh, thank god it's over! IT'S TIME TO RELAX!" Hyuna said while streching her arms out, "Yeah.Hey, Hyuna-ssi" I turned to Hyuna, but she already walked off. I removed my mic and slowly walked over to my dressing room, letting the make - up artist do their buisness. I sat down on the couch leaned back. Yoseob turned to me, he obviously could see the frusturation on my face. "Wo.Hyuseung  hyung, what's wrong. Did Hyuna noona walk off again?" I nodded slowly, "Why don't you go tell her next door?!" Yoseob said, pointing to the wall that blocked Hyuna's dressing room. "Aish, I don't know. I don't wanna face rejection. Not after what...'you know who' rejected me. Way back then." I pushed my hair back as I let  air out of mouth, "Are you still on that? Really. Hyung. You're better then that! Now go tell Hyuna noona!" Yoseob pushed his eyebrows together. He was dead serious. Once again I sighed, "Arraseo" I got up and left the dressing room...and never looked back. I was at her door now, I twisted the doornob. "Hyuseung!" Hyuna yelped as she ran towards me with open arms. I smiled at her, "I need to tell you something"

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Key X Chaerin : Key is my bestfriend... my gay bestfriend. He's dating Jonghyun, and they are just like a married couple. Now, Key's parents weren't to big on there only son going gay; So they kicked him out. I (being the awesome best friend I am)let Key live in my house, As long as he pay rent. So far, he hasn't missed rent day. He's very diva like. Anyway, let me get to the story. Okay, a few years after Key turned  gay and met Jonghyun, I've had this dream. The dream was, Key and I were in bed. And he turned to me with that look (the look he gives Jonghyun when he makes a corny joke) and he smiled at me. Then, he leaned towards me, and then for some reason..I leaned in too. After that...it just went blank. I think I love him. I think I love a Gay person.

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Dara X Taeyang : It was a chilly night in Seoul. All the stores were just about to close. I was just making my way home, when I spotted a petite girl, that looked about my age. She was playing one of those toy machines. You know, the ones with the claw and you have to pick up a toy with it. Her eyebrows were furrowed, and if you saw her, you would know all her concentration was focused on getting that toy she wanted. I stopped to look at her, not much in a very creeper-ish manner, but more like a curious one. It surprised me how focused she was on a child-ish game, how fail after fail she would try and try again. I mean, for crying out loud she has like a bunch of coins in that one baggy. In more curiousity, I entered inside the store. The store clerk swiftly walked over and tapped the lady on the back, "Excuse me, but the store is about to close. You can come again tomorrow though" there was a tint of sarcasm in  his voice. The lady turned to the man, and quickly calmed her tone, "I'm sorry, I will leave now. Thank you" then she quickly left, bumping into me as she walked out the door. "Do you know her?" I asked the store clerk, he turned to me with rasied eyebrows and something in his hand, "No,not personally. But she is pretty well known. Her name is Sandara Park, but most of the people who know her call her 'Toy Child' shes really obsessed over Toy machines." The store clerk turned around again and placed the object on the counter. 'Sandara Park...Toy Child.' I thought, 'Wonder why she likes those machines so much.' I said my thanks to the clerk and strolled off into the night. Quietly thinking about 'Sandara Park, Toy Child' and her obsession over Toy Machines.

Well, those are it C: hope you liked them. Please

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