Can I have your opinions on this little passage?

For as long as I have known, loneliness has always been my companion. I am the flickering light post standing on the dark kerb. I am the last tick of the clock. I am the withered flower straining against the wind. I am the stray dog scurrying for protection from the fires and storms. I am the little scratch on your arm, the melting snow flake, the broken bird. I am the never falling petal, forever immobile upon that tree.

People do not jeer at me. They cannot see me, but I am used to it.

I leave my room to gaze at my stars. They always flicker like they empathise with me. I do not believe them. They are too far and I am too small.

Loneliness, it is my only friend.


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12EXOEXO #1
Wow, really Peanut wow!! This is really well written, it really touches the soul!
whitelove
#2
This is so well-written, i can hear my heart breaking T_T
sleepingprince
#3
This is well written . The expression is good thou it's really sad but I think many people will be able to relate to it
Kuud3r3Baka
#4
it sounds really powerful to me for some reason and it intrigued me a lot. it sets a very dark and grim mood and it just has this depressing tone--
chanfluffles
#5
Whoa, well written dude! :o sounds sad
godna24
#6
Good inner feeling for an angst or dark story. Maybe action story. Nice one