Story Title: Guilty Pleasure

Story link: https://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1092823

Trailer link: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OlqXX2kTWKk&ebc=ANyPxKoOh-DadidKTuI0pHENt_bL_3QhOLumo1TKv75fOIZ3WkMAOFNQQzxdLJSUo4KcuplmeMh-z9fVxMGxPT7vTmhKUI6CnA

​Review for Guilty Pleasure

TRAILER 

* Definitely catches the angst part of the story 

* Alludes to the idea of scandals surrounding politics 

* Tense atmosphere created perfectly to lead into suspense

* Definitely catches attention

Poster
* Striking poster 
* Certainly caught me. 

Description 
* Apart from a few minor grammatical mistakes it sure catches attention 

Story development 
* Nice and slow build up from chapter 6-9
* Can't wait for sehun's secret

Character development 
* Also slow. Let's the reader know more about the main character and understand her views and problems. Telling the story from her point of view brings a deeper insight for the readers. 
* Where you introduced Sehun was perfect but I think that the situation in which he came in was quite unnecessary and illogical. Her blind date was at a museum and so she was parked near the building. And museums are often in the city or populated parts. Sooyoung wouldn't have walked far from the city. However it's your story and you can write what you desire. 
* Although I haven't read much of Sehun yet, his development seems to be going a little "wavey". But it's still early in the story and I'm sure you wanted to make him seem mysterious which is perfectly fine. 

Writing style suitability 
* Your style of writing is very suitable as the character speaks to the reader in a very friendly and casual way and the story follows the developing relationship between the main character and Sehun which also links to your writing style of first person and casual speech. But don't make your writing too casual. It'll drag the reader around and they may not understand some parts unless that is what you intended. 

Communication  
* You know what I'm going to say here. Yes it's the grammar. Mainly spelling and tense confusion. There are many instances where your spelling is not understandable and the sentence would not make sense to me. 
* There is major tense confusion in your writing. You mix present tense with past tense although some people will not notice, those who do will become confused as to whether or not the story is present tense or the sentence using present tense is a thought or not. I suggest you run your story through Office Word or other text editing software/programs or request for a beta reader. 

Personal opinion 
* I enjoyed the story and the idea of it connecting to politics, makes it a unique story. And the obstacle that the main character ran into in chapter nine would be entertaining to imagine it unfold.
* I will definitely read this