“Crossroads” 

I like the title, it’s simplistic and draws people in :) A tad cliche, though. 

 

Description and Forward/Graphics- 4/5

Description: I like the style of your description, although a better way to put it might be: “some things are meant to be. Other things, not so much.” 

 

Graphics: The poster is amazing. :)

 

Conclusion: I liked the layout of everything, and your front pages seems pretty solid, so good job, and it is quite aesthetically pleasing :) 

Characterisation: 17/20

Handled really well. I like the way Jongin seems so innocent and Kyungsoo is a very quiet kind of person. 

Plot- 22/25

 

The plot is very simple but sincere, so I’m going to give pretty high for this one. I think you handled the oneshot marvellously, it’s not at fanfic-classic level, but I do feel the emotions as I go through the text:) 

Flow- 10/15

I feel like you know what you’re doing in terms of the plot, but the way you use your language isn’t the best. Personally, I think that your writing has sentences which are way too short. My advice is to read the text out loud when you’re done writing them, minding all your punctuations. Do you feel like you’re panting as you go through the words? That’s exactly how I feel when the words appear in my mind. If you truly want to write something that is at fanfic-classic level, I would advice you to consider your sentence structure and lineations more carefully.  

 

Grammar: 10/15

 

No jarring mistakes. Overall, some phrasings were slightly strange to read so I would advice you on reading more and honing your writing style into something more intricate and familiarise yourself with the language:) 

 

Writing Style (originality/author's voice)- 10/15

You do have a unique writing style. Just that maybe you can improve a bit more and make it boom:) 

Total: 77/100