Odd one out

By: yingjumeihua

TITLE: 5

The title is meaningful and it is the story in just three words. It describes Kris, it describes the story, it describes how everything he is and does and believes in sets him apart from the rest. Nicely done.

DESCRIPTION: 5

The description is just spot on. It gave me the right amount of info that I needed as a reader and it was enough to pull me in and make me want to the read the story. It was also another way of retelling Kris’ life in SM; how he’s as free as a prisoner can be. I liked that.

GRAMMAR: 19

There were a few mistakes, just some misspelled and missing words but these were obvious. Since this one was longer than your other entry, there were more mistakes but it doesn’t really degrade the splendid work you’ve done on this. As always, the grammar was just on point and the sentences were structured really well making the words mesh well together in the end.

PLOT: 30

This was Kris leaving SM and his brothers, EXO, in another universe. It’s really cool. I thought about it, and this was awesome. Though it did made me miss Kris even more because he was my bias and him leaving broke my heart but as everything sometimes is, it was for the better. Here, Kris left the monster’s hands and found a new life where he could, yes keep his wings and breathe fire, and it was an amazing and touching process. The underdog that defies everyone and made the impossible, possible. This was well thought out, great job.

CHARACTERIZATION: 10

I liked how you portrayed EXO here as dragons, that was very cool. I liked Kris the most because I got to feel what he felt and it was all very realistic and he’s not even human, not even a real animal that exist in real life! He’s a dragon and he felt all these things and I felt them too, and wow, it was really something. You wrote them really well, great job.

WRITING STYLE: 10

Your writing style improved here a lot, since you posted this a year later. It was better and I’m honored to have read and judged on your work.

RELEVANCE TO THE PROMPT: 10 
Again, you choose the prompts wisely. I do think they fit the story really well, especially the song run boy run.  

OVERALL ENJOYMENT: 8

I liked how it was written overall, really. It made me feel things and it brought me back to the dark times of 2014 where Kris left EXO and everything just went downhill from there on out. It made me feel really sad, so did I enjoy it? Not really because it brought back memories of my baby Kris and omg feels everywhere when I finished it ; ~ ; great job on it though.

TOTAL: 97/100