Photograph
by yifanforever

TITLE: 3

The title doesn’t really does it job as the title of the story, in my own opinion of course. Because not only does it fail to capture my attention and to peak my interest and curiosity but it also lacks strength in holding the meaning behind the story. Sure, photograph, because Seungwan loves those, but other than that, I fail to see how it’s fully, unequivocally related to everything else in the story.

DESCRIPTION: 3

The description was okay, it’s kind of sappy and somewhat predictable and overly dramatic in ways. It didn’t quite appeal to me because it sounded a little bit cliché and I couldn’t see anything interesting in it even if I read between the lines. It didn’t quite have that wow factor I often look for and it didn’t leave much of an impact.

GRAMMAR: 16

There were a lot of mistakes, especially during the first and middle parts of the story. Just small mistakes scattered and littered here and there, but they were still obvious and slightly irritating as I tried to read on hoping there’d be no more interruptions. As I read, my flow began to be steady until the end. Your grammar is okay too, it’s good, kind of, and I mean on the basic level. The basic kind of good that’s not at all bad it’s not all that either. 

PLOT: 25

The plot was recycled in my own views and it was kind of unnerving as it unfolded itself to me. The flow was too fast also and towards the ending, everything became sort of messy instead of being resolved. Sehun and Seungwan was very messy, messier than Seungwan and Mark even. The part about Seulgi, Sehun and Kai’s secret activities behind their friends’ back was the messiest of all, like how can Seungwan continue to hang around them without being told? How can she be so chill about it? She completely brushed it off for the next few chapters only to have the issue pop up out of the blue just like that. I didn’t really enjoy that bit, but I was surprised and very much caught off guard when Seulgi and Sehun kissed. Like what the actual –

Anyway, the plot is… I don’t even know what to make of it. All I know is I didn’t quite like it and I tried to reread the whole thing but nothing, it doesn’t get to me and I can’t make myself feel anything as I read on.

CHARACTERIZATION: 8

I’m kind of disappointed at how Seungwan is not only y here but also very immature. I mean, I can totally deal with y but Seungwan doesn’t quite know how to draw lines and I thought she’d change for the better, she had those letters and everything and she even made efforts to apologize to people, and that showed maturity but she kept on having because of fun with Sehun? Umm, sure they’re teens and it’s in their blood and it's part of youth but come on. The only characters I did like and aren’t the least bit obnoxious and arrogant were Yeri, Jungkook, Joonmyeon and Joohyeon. I don’t even know what to think about the others. Everyone is so different and so loud and so boisterous that I don’t really get how their friends because that much people with that much similarities are totally supposed to repel each other but I don’t know, their friendship seemed tight and true to the core even though they refuse to tell anything to Seungwan.

WRITING STYLE: 8

The writing was simple and okay. It was fine, really. It’s plain yet sometimes it’s witty and has sense. There’s good balance between dialogues and descriptions and that’s good. But as I’ve mentioned, like the whole story itself, it didn’t quite have that wow factor that I wanted to read and see.

RELEVANCE TO THE PROMPT: 10 
Seungwan was a bit too much when she was brooding over Mark, but that’s not the point here. The point is, in the end, she managed to everything up and they were friends and she told herself to let go of him to find someone else better and that’s one of the most important things in the story here because that is the prompt and it was incorporated really well into the story despite everything else.  

OVERALL ENJOYMENT: 7

Story was messy but that’s life. It talked about friends and relationships and what it takes to be a seventeen-year-old. I didn’t regret reading it but I didn’t enjoy it all that much either. In the end, it was okay and I had some good laughs and raised some eyebrows but all was good in the end. Kind of. Great job, nevertheless.

TOTAL: 80/100