Wake me up (say enough is enough)

By: -anglestory08

TITLE: 5

I didn’t get the title at first, but after I read it, clarity took over me. The title is well written and it summarizes the story and the plot well enough; of dreams, fears, and everything in between that. The title is to the point and I actually kind of like it. I can’t see any flaws in it so 5/5.  

DESCRIPTION: 5

Description was very alluring and tempting. It was a well-constructed sentence that managed to capture my attention and I read it fondly because I was excited of what I may read later on. The description did not disappoint me, because it was short yet to the point and very much intriguing.

GRAMMAR: 19

Now, your grammar, vocabulary, writing and everything else is just spot on. I can’t scrutinize it or find something that I can criticize and critique on because your writing is absolutely flawless in and out of itself. I docked off a point only because there were two minor mistakes and I was reading the story so well and I got so immersed in it that when I stumble upon “the ones who are the deserve it the least live the shortest.” I got a little disappointed so yeah. But overall, your grammar and vocabulary is beyond me.

PLOT: 27

Honestly, I failed to see the depth of the plot. Was there even a stable, real one? Not sure. Although I do love everything about your entry, I can’t look past the fact that I couldn’t catch on to what the plot was. Am I slow or what, I don’t know but that’s how I felt. It’s beautiful yes, but it’s also very confusing and very vague. But despite it, I still liked the flow and the way things were going and how they were going. The story still had a good flow even without a stable plot and in the end, it worked out pretty fine.

CHARACTERIZATION: 10

Characters were definitely on point. Seulgi was described so well and in her eyes, we got to see what kind of person Sehun was. I really liked the way you described the two of them and how you even added in Soojung in. I liked how you molded these real life people into characters of your own work and fiction and how you made them entirely your own.

WRITING STYLE: 10

Your writing is wow. It’s absolutely amazing and that’s great considering the fact that I’m a reviewer and I’m subscribed to a hundred stories and I practically breathe fanfictions so I’ve gone through a lot of writing styles but yours is just one of a kind. Please continue writing because I would love to read your works in the future where I know you’ll improve even more.

RELEVANCE TO THE PROMPT: 10

I saw how you incorporated the prompt to fit your story and it was nice because I realized it in the end. Seulgi and Sehun were constantly haunted by the reality of their powers (?) and how they should never as much as place a toe in the line between imagination and reality or else they’ll face the consequences of insanity. They should be careful all the time and not overdo things. It was really good and very refreshing to read your story with this prompt and how you brought it to life and just made it yours. 

OVERALL ENJOYMENT: 10

Did I enjoy your story? YES I DID VERY MUCH. Despite the lack of plot, I liked your writing and I liked your characters and I liked how unique the story was. I adore your story and I think it deserves more than just the prizes I offer. It’s a good story, it really is, and I do hope you continue making more!

TOTAL: 96/100