Cover up darling, it’s getting cold
by: supervillainess

TITLE: 5

The title is spot on. I liked how it’s artsy yet simple and very much has the potential to grab attention. I liked it upon first read, it’s my kind of title.

DESCRIPTION: 5

The description was absolutely spot on. It not only had me wanting to read the story right away, but it also had me smiling like a total idiot because of how well it was written and it gave the right amount of information and it didn’t spoil anything. The description was really true, and I loved it.

GRAMMAR: 17

From the start to the end, the oneshot was littered with grammatical errors and minor, noticeable mistakes. I could let one or two pass, but by the end of the story, I actually lost count of how many mistakes were there. There had been a lot and it turned me off from reading to be honest. I was frustrated a little because I felt like it ruined my experience as a reader as I read on with interruptions of pesky errors here and there. I hope you reread your beautiful story to change those errors because it really is a shame.

Other than that though, your grammar is fairly good and plausible.

PLOT: 30

Your grammar or writing might’ve lacked, but the plot? Oh my goodness. Everything about the story was heartwarming. The very start of it was really sweet enough, and the end was just as sweet or perhaps even sweeter! I liked the last sentence. The last thought Kai had before it ended. It showed that they’ve matured, it showed that the story had a direction it was going and in the end, it reached that direction. It showed how the story had a good flow. Everything about this story was absolutely adorable and I loved reading it (despite the mistakes, though tbh, it would’ve been ten times better without the mistakes) and I loved, loved, loved the morals behind. It wasn’t just a regular, old love story but it talked off family and friendship and just life in general too! The struggles were realistic and the bond between them is something I can only dream of to happen to me. This story is a gem, thank you for sharing this to all of us.

CHARACTERIZATION: 10

I really loved the characters. I loved how Jongin and Krystal were portrayed here. I love their friendship with Taemin. I loved how the three of them grew up and matured over time. It showed. Jongin was just a teen, a young adult, when he married Krystal but towards the end, he became a father and he worked for his family and it was all so clear and satisfying to see and read that he matured well. Krystal, too. Taemin, the most. Taemin realized things and he grew up and he faced the reality of life and that was nice to read as well. I loved the way you wrote these characters and molded them into your own, I love them all.

WRITING STYLE: 9

Your writing really has potential, you as a writer as well. At the first part, your writing got me like “wow omfg” but towards the end, I grew weary and hesitant onto reading further because of the many mistakes. But to be honest, your writing has depth to it and you describe things and situations well in the story. Your writing is really good and if you fix the small yet blaringly obvious mistakes, it can be the definition of perfection.  

RELEVANCE TO THE PROMPT: 10 
Did the story fit the prompt or did the story fit the prompt?! YES, IT DID! Oh my goodness, the plot was one of the best I’ve ever read and that is saying a lot. You really incorporated the prompt into your story and let it inspire you. It was a really nice read, you did a wonderful job on this story.  

OVERALL ENJOYMENT: 9
Everything was on point and on fire and I only docked a point off because of the grammar mistakes because I couldn't let that go so easily. Other than that though, everything else was just perfection! I loved the three of them not just in this story but in general. I really enjoyed reading your story and it taught me a few things too and yes, I cried towards the end. The part where Kai realizes he’s never heard Teo cry before because Krystal doesn’t want him to worry? That part? Oh my god, it got the waterworks going and flowing. Again, you did a wonderful job.

TOTAL: 95/100