Out of My System (by xxdevilishxx) feedback

I honestly don't know how to describe my love for this fic! Like this is by far one of the best fanfictions I've read and let me just rant a bit and tell you why ((ok?))

1st: This story is realistic as hell.
- The starting situation itself isn't that typical: " this was supposed to a normal one night stand but immediately they felt something different and magical ect." but it actually went normally ((if you don't count the whole jimin crying and all because i don't think that happens 99.9 % of the time but regardless it was realistic)). 
 - And here comes my other point; the overall developing of the feelings was smooth and ((AGAIN)) super realistic. Neither of them suddenly were like *omg, i'm in love* and at the part where jimin passed out because he drank too much, there wasn't any awkward part where yoongi would just stare at him and be like "i never realized how beautiful he really is, why is my heart beating so fast" which happens in A LOT of fan fictions.
- The overall drama. Nothing was over exaggerated. Nothing. Although the whole situation where Jungkooks mother came to get him back could have gone way much worse with people storming out, crying etc. It didn't. And I'm clad that it didn't because it seemed like a real situation that anyone could find themselves in. Altogether you didn't forcefully try to create drama in places it isn't needed and I love that ((because I've read SO many fanfics with people getting run over by a car and losing their memory or some crazy people that are actually in a gang and that always gets someone kidnapped so thank you for not going down that road))

2nd: Character development
- I absolutely love how you gradually got to know more of the characters. Like there wasn't just suddenly one chapter where something tragic happens and they just spill everything out and fall in love and . They grew (as characters) in the same pace as you would get to know someone in real life. It doesn't happen in a day.
- Side characters and their stories and personalities were perfectly put in the story. There are a lot of fics where I feel like either there is too much side story rather than the main or then not enough. With this story I just constantly felt like these moments where they're hanging as a group are extremely vital for the story and I never felt like skipping them. Also I love the way you displayed the relationships between the other group members rather than just jimin and yoongis. One of my favorite moments was the night where they celebrated hoseok and jimins dance competition win. The reason is plainly because I love how it played out. It wasn't focused on the main pair (yoonmin) but you could see how yoongi got to know the others and the whole scene was just SO FREAKING REALISTIC. 

3rd: Length
- I know some people might not agree with me but I love the way you made the chapters. I'm the kind of person who really likes long chapters because I find them much more enjoyable rather than having 100 short chapters with cliffhanger in every single one. Although I read this after you had already finished the main story, I would've been so happy every time you would've updated because I would've got to read a super long chapter and just enjoy it in peace without any care in the world.

Overall I just really enjoyed this and although some people might think that I praised this story to high heavens I don't think anyone can change my opinion. This is just one of those stories you get emotionally attached to and I'll definately read this again! Thank you. You are a god.

 

 

 

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