Story Title - Alone
Story Link - http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/949612/alone-angst-fluff-jongmin-exo-chen-xiumin-xiuchen
Username - Paradise-Lost

TITLE:10 points
-7. interesting and could fire up the reader's curiosity

DESCRIPTION:10 points
-5. Kinda short. If this is meant to be a cliffhanger,this has not really achieved its mission

GRAMMAR AND CONSTRUCTION:15 POINTS
-7.Observe the use of short and concise sentences. If you are going to use sentences which are long,make sure that they are clear and precise. Using long sentences without clarity will confuse your reader and turn him/her off.

   APPEARANCE:10 points 
- 5. If a poster was in here,it would have made up for the overuse of spacing.

 IMPACT:10 points
- 8. This is really morbid but sure as hell it won't be easily forgotten. Kudos!

PUNCTUATION:5 points
-3. Please observe the use of the comma when you write like this:
ex.
"Oh shut up",I called as Jongin hit me on the ankle.
 

PLOT:20 points
-17. The plot is downright morbid but very original. However,it has no back story and even though it is a oneshot,it is incomplete.
 

ORIGINALITY:20 points
-20.  Morbid yet original storyline. Bravo!
 

-total score:77/100,there is always room for improvement! \o/