Story Name: YoonHae Mystery Oneshot: The Night When The Zombie Died

MARKS:

Plot:

-         Only a few authors here can pull of a crime/mystery story, some have tried and some have failed,
but you have pulled it off. The plot is something new to me and something I enjoy. It was refreshing and
honestly, one of the best one-shots I have ever read.

25/30 points

English:

The English is very good with a few minor mistakes here and there.

Examples:

 ...she still invited you in her birthday... - the correct word to use would be 'to' not in.

"Donghae had changes since he became famous." The manager said. - Should be, "Donghae had made changes since he became famous," the manager said, or instead of using had made changes you could use changed.

23/30 points

Creativity:

-       Stories like these are not seen very often compared to the amount of high school love stories
and a change like this is very welcomed to me. The twist in the story was really creative and how Taemin found out who was the murderer was also very good.

8/10 points

Description and Title:

- I can't really judge your description as it is just informing the readers of where the story comes from but I will give marks for the description in the story of where the one-shot came from. That description is really good and the quotes it in just perfectly. I don't think it is necessary to include YoonHae Mystery but it is really what you want in your title.

7/10 points

Writing style:

-         Stories like these are best in 3rd person view unless the story is actually about the murderer and why/how they did it. It is good that you used the 3 asterixes (***) to separate the scenes.

7/10 points

Enjoyment:

-    A very enjoyable one-shot with a twist that no one would have expected.

7.5/10 points

TOTAL SCORE: 77.5

STAR RATING: 4

A really good one-shot. A one-shot anyone would enjoy,
no matter what fandom they are from. I hope you continue to write these fabulous one-shots and do well with
them. =)

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Or if you do not understand something, please do not hesitate to contact me.

Reviewed by _uraqt