Undercover

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Jung Hoseok, Yook Sungjae and Cha Hakyeon are fellow Police men on the same Undercover mission :

Infiltrate the Big Hit High school to finally arrest one of the biggest Drug ring Leaders around this city.

They all have one person which they have to observe to find proofs But not only do they have to observe them – no, they have to gain their trust, to become a part of their lives.

Jung Hoseok has to observe the boy named Kim Taehyung, who seems to be right in the middle of everything and who possibly could deliver the missing proof.

Taehyungs two best friends, Jung Taekwoon and Jung Ilhoon also get observed, but by Cha Hakyeon and Yook Sungjae.

What starts as a simple undercover mission quickly develops into something different, which neither of the Detectives would have expected.

And while these three do their job by infiltrating the Big Hit High School, Officer Kim Namjoon has a different target. He has to observe Kim Seokjin, older brother of Kim Taehyung and has to go to the same University as him.

Let´s just say, he was prepared for many things, but not his upcoming feelings for Jin.  

Foreword

Summary : Jung Hoseok, Yook Sungjae and Cha Hakyeon are fellow Police men on the same Undercover mission :

Infiltrate the Big Hit High school to finally arrest one of the biggest Drug ring Leaders around this city.

They all have one person which they have to observe to find proofs But not only do they have to observe them – no, they have to gain their trust, to become a part of their lives.

Jung Hoseok has to observe the boy named Kim Taehyung, who seems to be right in the middle of everything and who possibly could deliver the missing proof.

Taehyungs two best friends, Jung Taekwoon and Jung Ilhoon also get observed, but by Cha Hakyeon and Yook Sungjae.

What starts as a simple undercover mission quickly develops into something different, which neither of the Detectives would have expected.

And while these three do their job by infiltrating the Big Hit High School, Officer Kim Namjoon has a different target. He has to observe Kim Seokjin, older brother of Kim Taehyung and has to go to the same University as him.

Let´s just say, he was prepared for many things, but not his upcoming feelings for Jin.  

 

Charachters :

Kim Taehyng, Age 17

Jung Ilhoon, Age 17

Jung Taekwoon, Age 18

Jung Hoseok, Age 20

Cha Hakyeon, Age 21

Yook Sungjae, Age 20

Km seokjin, Age 22

Kim Namjoon, Age 22

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Minesty #1
Chapter 3: Author-Nim, please continue this story! I can't wait!
kanimelife #2
Chapter 3: What happened I need more mang
kanimelife #3
Chapter 3: I like it I love it I want some more of it :3
YnVox98 #4
Chapter 3: dear taehyung, i am a fan of pigeons, so come to hug me babe~~~~
Epona27 #5
Waaaah so cuteee*-*Love you! -R :'D
Arashika #6
Chapter 2: Interesting so far... Your English is fine actually! Better than some native speakers I know :D

I'm quite curious what's going to happen in this story :D I wonder if any of them will be connected to the drug group in the end... I really hope not >_< its going to be interesting how the story pans out.

I'd also like to say, if there are things that you're not certain about (ie. University classes and their structure), I'd suggest just glossing over them. If the classes aren't important to the story, try not to mention them; if they must be mentioned, try to make them accurate. (To be fair, university is probably different in different countries but as far as I know they're usually not separated into classes; people pick their own courses and pretty much everyone has a different schedule even in the same major)

Your sentences have been fine, tense has been pretty consistent, looking good! You've also done a good job of avoiding the trap many writers fall into, which is writing every sentence with the same structure. It looks really good so far!

I'm not particularly familiar with vixx or btob, I'm mostly here for bangtan :P from that point of view, I think your characterization could use a little work, so far it seems like you've picked one aspect of their personalities and made that their main thing (ie. Taehyung being weird, Taekwoon being quiet, Jin being really nice), but it could be fleshed out more. For instance, if Taekwoon is really so antisocial, he wouldn't have volunteered his name without being asked; even just a shy glance or hint of interest in his eyes would make things make more sense, maybe.

That might also just be me being too picky lol, things are fine so far :D keep it up! I can't wait to see how the next chapter goes!

Great job, keep writing~
Rese_Candy #7
Chapter 2: I ship Neo soooo much. <3
And while I ship Sungjae and Minhyuk, I enjoy the IlhoonXSungjae parts nonetheless.
NanaEmperor #8
Chapter 1: It's really interesting by now. I'm looking forward to next chapter :D
joanna20 #9
Chapter 1: Ty. Update soon.
joanna20 #10
Update soon. Can't wait!