Tap That Title

Korey's K-pop Fanfic-Writing Guide
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No matter who you are, what your story is, or what fandom you are writing a fanfiction for, there will be a time when you are on the front page (as the most recently updated fanfic, if nothing else), and you should have two things going for you that will grab your reader's attention.  Those two things are your title, and the first 300-400 characters of your description – more or less eighty to ninety words.

The title is in a bigger font than most of the rest of the text on the page, and also in blue, so it kind of stands out a bit.  It's basically your way to grab somebody's attention and convince them to take a look at what they can see of the description.

 

TL;DR

Avoid: clichés, common titles, long titles, question titles, sentence titles, and titles that give away your entire story

Also Avoid: mispelling your title, using words absolutely nobody is going to understand (or be able to pronounce), trying too hard (and avoid calling the title a tittle – that's like calling yourself a writter)

Go for: something that encapsulates the essence of your story without giving the entire plot away, something that sounds catchy and trips off the tongue (e.g. with the help of alliteration, or "[first name] [last name] and the [whatever it is]"), something four/five words or under (four is apparently considered the optimum)

 

VL;RA (Very Long; Read Anyway)

or

Reasons for the Above

 

If you are writing in English, then chances are you want to conform to English convention when deciding on your title.  It may be different in your language or culture – in my experience of Korean dramas, for example, there are a fair number (of quite well known ones, too) which have titles for sentences, like My Girlfriend is a Gumiho, and It's Okay, That's Love.  But if you're writing in English, then your communication platform is English and the discourse surrounding English language and conventions.  While not everybody in your reader base will speak English as a first language, they subscribe to that language with some knowledge of how that language functions culturally through conscious or unconscious comparison to their own.  Some will be more familiar with it than others; some will speak English as their first (or sometimes, only) language.  Just like different countries have different notions and standards of things like beauty, the English-speaking world has its own notions and standards of what constitutes a good title from the perspective of an English-speaking audience.  Titles here tend either to be short and snappy, four words long, or longer but with a bounce and a ring to them.  Consequently, you do not want:

1) A boring title, or a title that is a cliché (e.g. His Mate – why does this stand out from anything else?  Mention of best friends and bad boys can usually be classified as clichés when it comes to titles too)

2) A title common to a lot of other works (e.g. Kingka's Mate – why does this stand out from anything else that's similar and make me want to read it?)

3) A sentence (e.g. The Kingka Is My Mate! – this is a statement, not a title)

4) A question (e.g. The Kingka Is My Mate? – wow, shock horror), particularly if it ends with an interrobang, like so: The Kingka is My Mate?! (double shock horror)

5) A title longer than four words (e.g. My Mate Is The Kingka – too long, attention gone)

6) A title that basically gives away your entire plot (e.g. The Kingka, My Mate – if I saw this title, I would immediately assume 1. it's a high school au, 2. the guy and the girl won't initially get on, 3. he's a werewolf (or fate intervenes), and 4. they're going to fall in love anyway.  Oh, and there will probably be a love triangle.  And the plot will centre around these.  And it's not really a plot I can immediately differentiate from dozens of other similar ones.)

Note: I don't know if any of these are actual titles: I just made them up.  I apologise if they are.

Under most circumstances, that is.  Obviously, there are people who can – and do – break those guidelines.  Off the top of my head, though, there aren't many famous ones that break the mould.  If you're going to break the mould, then you might at least do it well.  I've seen it done well in some cases.  But most of the time, I haven't.

When it comes to 1) clichés, the famous ones are the ones from which the cliché derives (e.g. Beauty and the Beast), so weren't clichés the first time they were used.  There's a handy list of what can be considered clichéd titles here.  As for 2), titles which are shared with multiple other stories are just a pain, particularly if they're generic.  Call your story something like, say, Loving My Best Friend, Forever, Elsewhere, The Chosen One, Possession, and then keying it into a search engine will probably give you more than one result and that, for somebody searching for your story is... well, irritating.  And confusing.  Especially if they don't know which author's version they're supposed to be reading, and even more so if the description doesn't tell very much... or if the plots are relatively similar and the descriptions are consequently similar.  Specific to AFF for both of these, including "annoying" or "husband" (or even "jerk") is likely (not certain, but likely) to land you on the bad side of these.  Especially if it's in any way combined with a questionmark or informal interrobang.

Referring to 3) there are successful titles that are sentences, but not very many.  Also, the only two I can think of off the top of my head are Some Like It Hot (great film, by the way) and One Flew Over The Cuckoo's Nest (fabulous play by Miller which I have seen numerous times).  Sporcle has a quiz listing more (for films).  One thing you'll notice about both the titles I've mentioned, though, is that, while they both encapsulate the essence of what the work is about, they don't give things away.  Some Like It Hot involves two guys (criminals?) crossdressing to escape a notorious ganglord and is a comedy.  The title indicates comedy and also that things are going to get pretty tense in some places.  It wouldn't be nearly so interesting if the title was We're Crossdressing To Escape The Mafia Boss.  Like, hello, plot tension?  Oh, oh, you've gone on holiday?  Oh, right.  Bye, then.

One Flew Over The Cuckoo's Nest is about patients in an asylum.  The cuckoo's nest is the asylum, and the one who flies over the nest is McMurphy.  But it's not something you're going to get without knowing the story, and even then you might not if you miss the nursery rhyme quoted in part 4 of the play.  Again, I Want To Escape The Asylum doesn't have quite the same ring, right?

As for 4) title questions, I can't think of any famous titles off the top of my head (yes, I know there will be some) other than Where's Wally?  Which is a kids' book.  Like a large number of book titles that are questions.  Or something like Why Is Water Wet? And A Thousand Other Things You Always Wanted To Know.  Sure, there are great ones out there, like Terry Pratchett's Where's My Cow? (but this is the Discworld we're talki

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seishu
#1
Chapter 6: the beginning is always the hardest part. i read this a couple of years ago for fun, and i was impressed by your knowledge and critical analyzations of first lines. however. i would like to add my own critique as well. granted, i am well aware that this was written and updated a few years ago, but if you ever decide to revamp some of the sections, i hope you take these into consideration.

for the "catch-22" first line(s), i think it is a bit problematic to refer to it as a "curveball" since while it is going for shock value, the shock is supposed to come from the lack of heteronormativity. i think an analyzation of that shocks would be beneficial since it relies on an expectation and subversion. i think explaining the plots (to an extent) as well can help as well since this book is about trying to be discharged from the army to avoid fighting in a war but being caught in the titular catch-22. is this first line equating homouality to a mental illness? or are looking at genuine love? since this book was written in a different time period, and views have changed, i think studying and questioning why we are caught off guard and/or shocked by this first line helps us understand our intrigue. are we interested only because we are shocked? or because we are excited/intrigued by (possible) representation?

the one from "the bell jar" should also have more expansion since the whole point of mentioning the rosenburgs is setting the reader up for a time and place. there really shouldn't be so much intrigue to why they are dead since this is a historical anecdote rather than solely a plot point or metaphor. it tells us that we are a.) probably in the united states and b.) it takes place during the cold war. this first line is a great way to introduce the setting and some minor characterization rather than just an exciting beginning. of course, if you are unaware of american history which is perfectly fine and normal really, the execution of the rosenburgs would be a wtf moment. it gets the job done as you said, but i think elaborating on what i mentioned above is still important since it is more than just intrigue.

as for the original example sentences you gave, while they pique my interest, they all feel the same. i understand you are trying to make them based off a single idea of a character being the new kid at school, the first three especially follow the same pattern of A+B=C. the character (I/Joy/Jinyoung) then some sort of time measurement ("two days etc."/"seven minutes"/"less than half a day") that helps emphasizes a negative aspect of school (detention/general dislike/bullies). your last example doesn't follow the same formula, but it might as well since the vibe is completely the same.

there isn't anything wrong starting off a school story with negativity, but i think giving only one type of atmospheric example fails to show the variety of ways in which you can do it. partly i'm critiquing this is because beginning any type of #schoollife fic with these type of opening lines has already been done and doesn't really offer anything new to the table other than the fact that you doing it with a lot more finesse and technique. the other reason is because i feel when you are only giving examples that are very similar to each other like this, in the atmospheric tone, it limits your ability to show your skills as a writer. it pigeonholes you.

other atmospheric techniques i think that you probably should have discussed would be a beginning that just sets up the setting and world building. kind of like the beginning of "the song of achilles" by madeline miller ("my father was the king and the son of kings.") or "the last unicorn" by peter beagle ("the unicorn lived in a lilac wood, and she lived all alone.") another one that is my personal favorite is dramatic irony. this is stories like "the secret history" by donna tartt ("the snow in the mountains was melting and bunny had been dead for several weeks before we realized the gravity of our situation.") and "everything i never told you" by celeste ng ("lydia is dead. but they don't know this yet.") the latter one directly inspired the first line of a fic i'm working on. i think this is kind of like a nudge-wink to the reader, like hey i'm gonna let you in on a secret that the main characters don't even know about it. it keeps up the suspense you can build around it. or even the beginning of "the stranger" by albert camus is worth talking about since it is what i personally think is one of the pinnacles of immediate characterization ("maman died today. or yesterday, i don't know.")

you isolate the first lines from the body of the story. having an interesting first line is always good, but the way you address it during some of the examples just feels off. for instance, "mortal engines." you're probably going to read the description of the book or fic before you begin reading it. so why are you terribly surprised by how it starts? how else would a book like that start? it's intrigueing, sure. but if you have the premise of the story, why is it so shocking? there needs to be more merging of all the sections since these parts don't function independently. and this is the most recent chapter, and you haven't gone on to make more chapters discussing other topics, but i think there is also a lot of focus on a hook rather than what flows best. so this makes it feel not necessarily less genuine, but you're making anyone taking advice from this rely more on that first line than the rest of the chapter. i think this probably should have been a section in the "opening chapter" listed in your table of contents, but i get why you dedicate a chapter itself to this topic. to me, judging a story by it's first line is like judging a pilot episode by its first scene. having intrigue and shock isn't bad at all, but there is a definite buildup to something that should keep the reader engaged.

if you ever do update this (because who knows - maybe you've moved on to greener pastures), i think having a chapter dedicated to world building and setting would be great since no one ever really discusses that on this site. having a chapter on themes would be great to. like a discussion of how you can make a story impactful enough for the readers to be able to take something away from it. and character development! honestly, probably the most rewarding part of any story.
revolamard #2
Chapter 6: Wow, very helpful because im stuck on how to start my paper ( i have one page to describe an event that happens in 1 minute or less)
revolamard #3
Chapter 2: Im in a creative writing class and this is very helpful to me
rosejardin
#4
Thank you for this helpful guide!
oceanscapes #5
Chapter 6: wow I love this! I come across rant books quite often, which call out authors on their poor-writing skills and/or cliches, but I like how you're actually teaching and helping people with it.
Btw that Jackson opening-line makes me want to write a fic like that xD
Nutellachanyeollah_
#6
I think this is gonna help me. Thanks for the guide!
infinitelyreyaxo
#7
I just remembered this existed lol
Jikuobase-147
#8
Chapter 5: About the italics - I don’t know if you’re a comic book fan, but in comics almost every other word is stressed, but there doesn’t seem to be any particular reason for this. Do you have any idea why?

(P.S. I apologise if you’re not a comic reader because then you will probably have no idea what I’m talking about).