Entry #1 (iluvcutestuffandidky)
JongKey Writing Contest [Kalafina Edition] - CLOSED
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Title: GoodBye | Author: iluvcutestuffandidky | Genre: Slice of Life, Angst | Other Pairings: None | Prompt: 20
Description:
"Goodbye. Couldn’t say it until now, I’ve hurt you so many times."
A/N:
First of all, thank you for joining the contest. :) I`m glad you did. I liked your story, but sometimes I couldn`t follow, like there were some missing pieces. And sometimes, there were some gremmar issues, but nothing big or something that would make this story bad or something. I just felt like it was too fast? No, I mean, it would have been better to slow down a bit, for example those break lines (I hope you know what I mean. You added them, but only later on). Anyways, its still a good Oneshot.^^
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