Forbidden Love

suuperDARZ
My story has already been proofread! I hope it gets to your liking readers. Thanks to * 墨花 * Spilled Ink Grammar Shop for helping me. :)

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exobyun_aegyo #1
(sort-of-professional comment)
Although there are some misspelled words (you might want to have me as your proofreader instead... :P just kidding), Forbidden Love made my heart skipped a lot of times :"> I love how the Korean expressions you mixed are so well-timed and very fit for the character saying it which made the story looked more realistic. I also noticed how you inserted a TaoRis part :D I see what you did there. Haha!

Considering that this is your first fanfic, you did a great job! You must have known each of them to be able to create a story well. Aaaand, that's it. Yehet for a job well done! I'm looking forward to read more stories from you. ^_^

(EXO fan comment)
waaaaaa~!! <3 I love it! While reading, I can imagine Luhan and Xiumin's facial expressions clearly! =)) Even Lay looks so cute! Hahaha! Omo.. Your writing skills and my imagination are a good combination! ;) Write some more! :D My imagining skills will stay put here, waiting for them :3 Although you seem like a XiuHan fan, could you please write a story where other members are a part too? Kamsahamnida! ^_^

BTW, the last line was heartbreaking :'( how dare you play with my heart.
Tokyoangel1000
#2
Chapter 1: This was a really great story! So many happy xiuhan moments ^^ You did a great job with this, well done :D
anieina
#3
Chapter 1: clap! clap! clap!
this is great! the best! i love how you write the story, the flow of it. it is amazing!
nice job for your first XiuHan fic!
PhantomTrancyVongola
#4
Chapter 1: I like the ending.. ' The bad news is waiting for them' I almost cried tbh bc we all know what the bad news is.... , anyway keep up the good work and ship xiuhan! Lol
xiumin21 #5
Chapter 1: this is good... totally great... one of the best!!! you're really good I seriously hope that you would write some more Xiuhan fanfics...
Loolyicecream #6
Chapter 1: i like it <3