Zero is a Color - Jaydreamer
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One problem with this though, is the capitalization. It should be Zero Is a Color.
My ‘why’ was answered when I read the description, and I mean that in a good way. The universe in which your story was set was already established in the description—this meant that I wouldn’t be confused once I read your story. It was a good introduction, and although I also feel like other people may find that your description reveals too much but it’s good enough for me.
The font size and style didn’t take away from readability. The poster also suited the mood of the fic…it wasn’t angsty and it wasn’t fluffy—just right in the middle, where your story is.
Soulmate AU fics aren’t new to me but this is the first time I encountered a soulmate!au fic where most of it was set in the hospital, so I commend you for that, for giving this genre a flavour of your own.
While I was reading, I wondered how Hoseok immediately knew that the buff guy on the other side of the road was his soulmate. While his the numbers in his watch were going down, Hoseok’s anxiousness and excitement was shown, but the moment his eyes laid on Hyunwoo, it didn’t at all feel special…and I get it that it wasn’t supposed to be like that (Hyunwoo, after all, wasn’t his soulmate), but I feel like if you instead put emphasis on that moment, you’d fool your readers (lol) and make the plot twist more shocking. To do this, I thought you could say: He looked across the street, through the passing cars. And Hoseok saw him.
I was confused while I was reading that part because I knew that Hyungwon was skinny, and I was expecting this to be a HoseokxHyungwon fic, but yeah, those are just my two cents on that front ^^.
Your title was all over this fic, not literally, but I thought it was great that the idea of (Zero is a Color) was reiterated all throughout this fic. I especially love this line:
“But gazing into Hyungwon's eyes, all Hoseok could think was, zero was such a lovely shade of brown.”
Your fic made me laugh, swoon, and cringe (because Hyungwon was a straightforward creep in Hyungwon’s room lmao). I can’t say it made me sad, though, since I don’t get sad because of written works. But I do understand why your other readers would, so the problem is all me.
That said, I feel like Hyunwoo’s letter was a bit out of place. I understand its purpose, though, and it also helped Hoseok in realizing that “Zero is just the beginning”. But, I don’t know, it just felt a bit random? They were the words of someone who had found and lost his soulmate too soon and he somehow wanted to help Hoseok who had just found his own soulmate. I just felt like there were unnecessary details on that letter because it established another pairing that wasn’t exactly crucial to the story.
I really babbled on that last part, I’m so sorry if I didn’t make sense, but I'll discuss it more below.
I liked how you wrote the details. It felt like I was in the same room as Hoseok this whole time. Good job on that one!
“Instead, he had poured over every picture of Hyungwon that was in the magazine he brought with him from the waiting room.”
The story was set in a few days and even with such a short time, you got to execute the plot well. Some parts were confusing in that there were two nameless people who were in the accident, but it probably just needs some re-reading.
When I first received this request, I was excited to review it because I love Monsta X! This is actually my first Monsta X fanfic and I want to thank you for giving me the honor of reviewing this story! This is, by far, the best fic I’ve ever had the pleasure of reviewing, so thank you for giving me that experience!
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